Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Tantor

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Tantor

  • Nominated by: Skippy Farlstendoiro 06:16, June 9, 2010 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: Not to be confused with Fnnbu's species. Seriously.

(3 ACs/4 Users/7 Total)

Support

  1. Clone Commander Lee Talk 16:50, June 10, 2010 (UTC)
  2. ToRsO bOy 18:42, June 14, 2010 (UTC)
  3. Good Job :). VadersFist666 19:27, June 25, 2010 (UTC)
  4. NaruHina Talk Anakinsolo 03:47, July 2, 2010 (UTC)
  5. ACvote This was fun.—Tommy 9281 14:02, July 6, 2010 (UTC)
  6. ACvote Toprawa and Ralltiir 04:48, July 14, 2010 (UTC)
  7. ACvote Jonjedigrandmaster (Talk) 13:50, July 18, 2010 (UTC)

Object

Lee attacks
  • Place of birth is missing in the infobox.
  • was born in the planet Born in the planet ?
  • Intro is to short compared to the bio.
  • Otherwise nice. Clone Commander Lee Talk 16:26, June 9, 2010 (UTC)
I dunno about Fnnbu, I was expecting an elephant
  • Say when he was born and where in the intro.
  • "Tantor was an Esoomian pirate brawler who stopped several mutiny attempts." This starts a little too quickly. Mainly, attempts against whom.
  • "Conscious of his limitations in brain, he restricted his activities to easy jobs." Reword.
  • Why did Tantor have medical bills?
    • OS: "(...) if his boss hadn't reneged on his pledge to pay Tantor's medical bills after a run-in with a clan of Gamorreans." So, either Tantor anticipated being injured during the run-in, or he has some chronic disease or previous injuries... Anyway, speculation. Reworded in the intro.
  • Stopping the mutinies wasn't really in his job description, was it?
    • OS doesn't specify whether he had a contract or anything, but nonetheless changed.
  • Why was Tantor no longer a bounty hunter when he reached Tatooine?
    • Because his gear no longer includes the Certificate. Reworded. Skippy Farlstendoiro 17:39, June 28, 2010 (UTC)
  • Tantor also had brushes, including several forms of assault, with agents of the New Republic. What other kinds of "brushes" were there. I'd suggest using a different word.
  • "A professional enforcer who collected debts for anyone paying him, Tantor also worked as a bodyguard and an assassin for money." Consider rewording this. Did he have hang-ups over who he wold kill for?
    • Better? OS does not mention hang-ups or anything like that. Skippy Farlstendoiro 17:39, June 28, 2010 (UTC)
  • "However, and although he was not particularly intelligent, he had a certain guile and ambushed prey from dark alleys." Double "and"
  • The next sentence is POV
  • "He commonly carried a vibro-ax, although not always the same one; however, he could also use his naked, hooved fists to kill a person with violence." Not really relevant that he carried different axes. You should not use "although" and "however" in the same sentence.
  • NaruHina Talk Anakinsolo 12:27, June 18, 2010 (UTC)
    • Thank you for your review. If you are interested in elephants, can I offer you my other nomination, Cragmoloid? Skippy Farlstendoiro 17:39, June 28, 2010 (UTC)
VadersFist666
  • The redlink is an eyesore and should be fixed.
    • It is within the limit of three redlinks, so he does not have to make an article if he does not want to. NaruHina Talk Anakinsolo 00:49, June 24, 2010 (UTC)
      • I understand that I was just saying it's an eyesore and "should" be removed, I meant to strike it out after I wrote it anyway. I'm sorry I didn't specify. VadersFist666 02:08, June 24, 2010 (UTC)
  • Also one sentence states that, "He could also use his naked, hooved fists to kill a person with violence." in all of the pictures it shows him with 3 fingers not hooved hands.
    • This means inconsistency of sources. Mentioned under BtS. Skippy Farlstendoiro 16:56, June 25, 2010 (UTC)
  • Also it should be, "violently kill a person." instead of, "kill a person with violence." Other than those, well done. VadersFist666 18:35, June 23, 2010 (UTC)
Jujiggum
  • In the intro you say the captain was killed, but in the body you just say he was jettisoned in an escape pod. Do you know for sure that he died? If so, please specify this in the bio.
  • Also, in the body you say only that a discussion ensued Tantor's pay-raise request; please specify that the captain refused to give him a raise; otherwise Tantor's actions seem kinda random
    • Original source doesn't give details; added all I could add without speculation (I personally think the captain might have raised Tantor's pay, but not as much as Tantor wanted). --Skippy Farlstendoiro 10:29, July 18, 2010 (UTC)
  • That's all I've got. Nice work. Jonjedigrandmaster (Talk) 02:54, July 18, 2010 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 13:50, July 18, 2010 (UTC)