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Tagge protoblade

  • Nominated by: YakovChaimTzvi (he/him/his) ChissAscendancyCanonSymbol (talk) 17:43, 10 January 2022 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments:
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Support

Interesting — Samonic ChissAscendancyCanonSymbol 17:59, 28 April 2022 (UTC)
  1. ACvote Ayrehead02 (talk) 09:17, 21 July 2022 (UTC)
  2. Now… Interesting. Samonic ChissAscendancyCanonSymbol 19:19, 16 August 2022 (UTC)
  3. TK-462 (talk) 06:33, 11 September 2022 (UTC)
  4. Manoof (he/him/his) (talk) 05:50, 2 October 2022 (UTC)
  5. ACvote Nice. 1358 (Talk) 10:17, 8 October 2022 (UTC)
  6. ACvote OOM 224 09:04, 23 October 2022 (UTC)

Object

Luca
Spooky
  • Is there any particular reason Board (by itself) is consistently capitalized after the initial usage of caps in the full term of Executive Board?
    • Should it not be? I assumed it would be (e.g. "Empire" for "Galactic Empire") -- YakovChaimTzvi (he/him/his) linkWP:Chiss (talk) 18:47, 21 March 2022 (UTC)
      • Given it's a comic, it can't really be said whether Board is capitalized on it's own, I would think? Empire's different in the case of numerous sources capitalizing it on it's own, but say, a "board meeting" as a phrase is a pretty generic thing that's generally decapitalized.—spookywillowwtalk 16:59, 22 March 2022 (UTC)
  • The third image's caption could mention that he's killed by said blade, though he's dying in the imagery, the image should be tied in.
  • I've noticed some dupe links and missing ones.
    • I removed dupes. What are missing? -- YakovChaimTzvi (he/him/his) linkWP:Chiss (talk) 18:47, 21 March 2022 (UTC)
  • Context for Forthe. Seems unnecessary to have Silas' full company title twice as context as well, could that just be replaced with, "he pled for his life..."
    • Forthe context added
    • Re: Silas: done. -- YakovChaimTzvi (he/him/his) linkWP:Chiss (talk) 18:47, 21 March 2022 (UTC)
  • With some wording rearranging, it might be nice to have (some very short) context that Silas himself was not the direct hirer of the mercenaries. While he certainly admitted to treachery, it reads as confusing without noting Crimson Dawn passed on the commission in the section where Boushh seems to attack the person employing him without recognition.—spookywillowwtalk 02:10, 13 March 2022 (UTC)
  • Can part of that author statement about the blade's working be made into a quote?
    • Can I do that with Twitter? -- YakovChaimTzvi (he/him/his) linkWP:Chiss (talk) 17:02, 28 March 2022 (UTC)
      • Yeah you can cite it to the archive link of the tweet.—spookywillowwtalk 22:49, 29 March 2022 (UTC)
        • Done. Feel free to comment on or change the formatting. -- YakovChaimTzvi (he/him/his) linkWP:Chiss (talk) 20:51, 8 April 2022 (UTC)
  • If you're going to mention the Legends connection, can it be known what source those originated from in that continuity?—spookywillowwtalk 16:59, 22 March 2022 (UTC)
    • Uh, let me see about that. -- YakovChaimTzvi (he/him/his) linkWP:Chiss (talk) 17:02, 28 March 2022 (UTC)
    • Done. Might need some tweaks to formatting, but the info is there. -- YakovChaimTzvi (he/him/his) linkWP:Chiss (talk) 17:14, 28 March 2022 (UTC)
Ecks Dee
  • In the intro, the first two sentences both say that the protoblade was created; can we have some variation here?
    • Is "manufactured" better for the second? -- YakovChaimTzvi (he/him/his) linkWP:Chiss (talk) 00:32, 24 April 2022 (UTC)
  • Some items in the introduction require slight context: Boussh, Acquisitor.
  • The article treason describes criminal action against a legitimate government (i.e. a legal/judicial term), not the general concept of betrayal. Is it really appropriate to link it here?
  • Please check your image caption punctuation. Complete sentences get a full stop.
  • What's the reason for stripping the default quote formatting in the Bts?
    • I assumed we treated real-world quotes differently at the time, but I've removed it. -- YakovChaimTzvi (he/him/his) linkWP:Chiss (talk) 00:32, 24 April 2022 (UTC)
      • Please use single quotation marks (' ') for quotes within quotes, per the Manual of Style. 1358 (Talk) 20:51, 3 May 2022 (UTC)
  • Pardon me if this has been discussed already, but is there no applicable quote for the Description? 1358 (Talk) 15:35, 15 April 2022 (UTC)
    • I couldn't find one that didn't fit better under History. -- YakovChaimTzvi (he/him/his) linkWP:Chiss (talk) 00:34, 24 April 2022 (UTC)
  • The Description section jumps back and forth quite a bit; for instance, you talk about its unpowered state in both the first and the second paragraph, and you discuss the gauntlet in both paragraphs, as well. See if you can make the section a bit more structured.
    • I tweaked it. Better, or should I do more? -- YakovChaimTzvi (he/him/his) linkWP:Chiss (talk) 16:26, 23 May 2022 (UTC)
  • Third paragraph of Creation and testing: you first say the blade is too expensive and costly to mass-produce, then that the Empire will never buy it, and then again that it's costly to mass-produce. Please rewrite this for less repetition.
    • I removed the mention of Forthe, which seemed extraneous. Is it better now? -- YakovChaimTzvi (he/him/his) linkWP:Chiss (talk) 16:26, 23 May 2022 (UTC)
      • Looks better. Can we reword one of the two "Domina insisted" though, for more variation? 1358 (Talk) 07:37, 1 June 2022 (UTC)
        • I changed the second one to "Domina further asserted". -- YakovChaimTzvi (he/him/his) linkWP:Chiss (talk) 23:10, 3 June 2022 (UTC)
  • Review note: quote attributions should generally be in present tense. 1358 (Talk) 17:50, 19 May 2022 (UTC)
  • Review note: I removed the link to treason because that article discusses the legal concept of treason (i.e. against a government) rather than the general act of betraying someone. 1358 (Talk) 10:17, 8 October 2022 (UTC)
Macaroni
  • I don't think that the bit about Silas's only crime being getting caught is relevant to the weapon.
  • Review note: coordinating conjunctions should really never be placed directly after a semicolon unless the semicolon is being used in place of a comma (ie in a list). JediMasterMacaroni(Talk) 00:06, 17 June 2022 (UTC)
Ayrehead
  • The second paragraph of the intro is currently one extremely long sentence which could use breaking up. Ayrehead02 (talk) 14:18, 22 June 2022 (UTC)
  • You should mention the Acquisitor higher up since that's where Dominia tests the blade if I'm remembering correctly. Ayrehead02 (talk) 14:18, 22 June 2022 (UTC)
Thrawn
  • Thrawn: Alliances does not say that Cortosis is a Metal. -ThrawnChiss7 (talk) 20:44, 23 June 2022 (UTC)
    • replying on Yakov's behalf -- Padme calls it a metal in Alliances. BloodOfIrizi (talk) 21:30, 2 July 2022 (UTC)
      • Where? (I have Alliances, and couldn't find it) -ThrawnChiss7 (talk) 19:09, 21 July 2022 (UTC)
        • Amidala talking about cortosis: "What do they bring in from the mine? Some sort of heavy, grayish metal?” Samonic ChissAscendancyCanonSymbol 09:27, 23 July 2022 (UTC)
Kilji blade
  • I believe adding context for the Galactic Civil War would be beneficial. (combatants)
  • On what capacity does the Tagge protoblade appear in Doctor Aphra (2020) 17?
    • Just a flashback from Domina Tagge's POV. I don't think it's worth mentioning the context of the flashback, but I will if others do. -- YakovChaimTzvi (he/him/his) linkWP:Chiss (talk) 17:35, 5 August 2022 (UTC)
  • If the protoblade appeared in the comic mentioned in my previous objection, the article must say "first appeared" in the comic War of the Bounty Hunters — Boushh 1.
  • "from Star Wars Legends" should be "from the Star Wars Legends continuity," or similar, as some readers may not know it is a continuity.
  • I think that the image in Tagge protoblade#Usage during an attack should be changed to the one in Alyssa Wong's tweet, as it displays the blade fighting enemies and what I believe is the protoblade deactivating. Samonic ChissAscendancyCanonSymbol 19:08, 18 July 2022 (UTC)
  • You have two duplicate links. "Galactic Empire" and "Marvel Comics."
  • " lightsabers used by Jedi during the Galactic Civil War[1] " this reads like the Jedi used it during the civil war. Did you mean that the protoblade was manufactured during the war? Samonic ChissAscendancyCanonSymbol 21:00, 5 August 2022 (UTC)
    • Oh, fixed to be unambiguous. -- YakovChaimTzvi (he/him/his) linkWP:Chiss (talk) 18:29, 16 August 2022 (UTC)
OOM
  • Prolly want to mention the "Tagge Protosaber" name in the BTS as well
  • As mentioned on Discord, the Golden Age of the Sith comic should be specified as the prologue issue OOM 224 17:08, 10 October 2022 (UTC)
    • Better? (Also, sorry for taking so long) -- YakovChaimTzvi (he/him/his) linkWP:Chiss (talk) 08:05, 23 October 2022 (UTC)

Comments

  • Just to inform you, the Tagge protoblade is on the cover for Doctor Aphra (2020) 28, so it's possibly going to need an update when that issue come out, if it hasn't passed by that time Lewisr (talk) 16:34, 20 October 2022 (UTC)

Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 09:04, 23 October 2022 (UTC)