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T'chooka D'oon
(3 ACs/4 Users/7 Total)
Support
- That's all for me. Well done. VadersFist666 19:30, June 25, 2010 (UTC)
- Lighstaber color ? Clone Commander Lee Talk 13:25, June 26, 2010 (UTC)
- Great job, Jang.--Jedi Kasra (comlink) 23:24, June 26, 2010 (UTC)
GG all the way. Chack Jadson (Talk) 00:39, June 28, 2010 (UTC)- SoresuMakashi(Everything I tell you is the truth) 08:16, June 30, 2010 (UTC)
- —Tommy 9281 14:14, July 6, 2010 (UTC)
Xicer9
(Combadge) 16:02, July 6, 2010 (UTC)
Object
Vadersfist
Only a few minor things for me ;). The first being in this sentence, "Accompanied by his Padawan, Flynn Kybo, and a group of clone troopers, D'oon needed to rescue Anx Ambassador Quiyyen from Confederate forces."- I believe, "needed to recue..." would sound better as "was tasked with recuing Anx Ambassador Quiyyen from Confederate forces."Similarly in this sentence, "During the mission on the planet, D'oon and Kybo—accompanied by a group of clone troopers—had to rescue Anx Ambassador Quiyyen from Confederate forces.[3]" I believe "had to rescue..." should be replaced with "were tasked with rescuing..."Also in the first part of the last sentence I think "on the planet" can be removed, it just doesn't sound right, to me at least, and it still sounds fine if removed. Other than that it seems very well done. VadersFist666 07:27, June 25, 2010 (UTC)
- All addressed; thanks for the review. JangFett (Talk) 16:47, June 25, 2010 (UTC)
Soresu
More detail on exactly how he dies (as seen in the image), would be good.SoresuMakashi(Everything I tell you is the truth) 12:58, June 25, 2010 (UTC)
Lee attacks
No P&T or P&A- Read the comment section. Also, I feel there's simply not enough information for a P&A section as well.
- I read the section, but still something of his force potential and lighsaber skills could be there.
- Read the comment section. Also, I feel there's simply not enough information for a P&A section as well.
His death could be expanded in the bio.- Lee, everything from the comic is there. Anything else would be pbp.
- Would it kill you to stated that he was cut in halfes.
- Lee, everything from the comic is there. Anything else would be pbp.
Place of death is missing in the Infobox.- If you read the article, this is an easy {{SoFixIt}}, Lee. Addressed. JangFett (Talk) 16:47, June 25, 2010 (UTC)
- Yes but I've seen that too often. Clone Commander Lee Talk 18:13, June 25, 2010 (UTC)
- If you read the article, this is an easy {{SoFixIt}}, Lee. Addressed. JangFett (Talk) 16:47, June 25, 2010 (UTC)
- Nice to see a comic article from you. And a "Grievous Kill" is especially nice. Clone Commander Lee Talk 13:45, June 25, 2010 (UTC)
Query
In the intro, it says that Grievous killed him with his lightsaber, yet in the image it depicts him being cleaved in thirds with two lightsabers. You might consider adding a link to Sai tok to the bio.If he was a Jedi General, woundn't this mean he was loyal to the Galactic Republic? Is so, this should be listed in the infobox's affiliations.I would object to the lack of P&T and P&A, but Lee already did. I will point out that I would think that taking on Grievous to ensure his team had enough time to enter the gunship is right up the P&T section's alley. Also, lightsaber color might be, as well. As for the P&A, the bio's quote does say that he fought well and was skilled, so couldn't that be added?- Sorry if this seems more nitpicky than usual, but this article is really interesting.--Jedi Kasra (comlink) 21:55, June 25, 2010 (UTC)
Comments
Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 16:34, July 6, 2010 (UTC)
- The first Grievous comic was his only appearance. In the comic, he didn't speak. JangFett (Talk) 05:34, June 25, 2010 (UTC)
- For those who want a P&A section in the article, I'm sorry, but there's simply not enough information for one. It's unnecessary. I have added a P&T, and that should be suffice. JangFett (Talk) 01:43, June 26, 2010 (UTC)
- What do you think of adding a sentence like "though his Padawan considered him a talented Jedi, D'oon was unable to best Grievous" to P&T? Chack Jadson (Talk) 00:22, June 28, 2010 (UTC)