Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Stripe

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Stripe

  • Nominated by: MauserComlink 09:06, 24 July 2009 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: Another clone for you. 990 words.

(3 ACs/2 Users/5 Total)

Support

  1. No problem. Kilson Likes PIE 12:26, 24 July 09 (UTC)
  2. Remember that only italics are used in comic quotes, never bold. Otherwise look good after a copyedit. —Master Jonathan(Jedi Council Chambers) 04:06, 26 July 2009 (UTC)
  3. Inqvote IFYLOFD (You will pay the price for your lack of vision!) 03:07, 29 July 2009 (UTC)
  4. ACvote CC7567 (talk) 22:58, 5 August 2009 (UTC)
  5. ACvote Chack Jadson (Talk) 01:47, 16 August 2009 (UTC)

Object

  1. It's the least I could do after you gave me that Wookiee cookiee
    • "...Rodent tried to escape, though Rex chased him and destroyed him with a blaster shot." Too many pronouns, change the second him to Rodent or the droid.
      • Done.
    • "Determined to stop the spy, Stripe had thrown a V-1 thermal detonator at the grate, which evaporated both the droid and a solid portion of the station's interior." Two things wrong here. First, the correct tense would be, "Stripe threw a..." Second, I think you should replace evaporated with destroyed. I believe evaporated only goes along with liquids, not solids, and if not, destroyed still probably sounds better.
      • Done.
    • "Stripe proudly responded that the clones never left anything half-done." You repeated the same thing word-for-word in both the biography and the Pts. Just changeup some of the words in one of the sentances.
      • Tweaked the one in bio.
    • "The character of Stripe made his only appearances in Mouse Hunt, a short 5-page webcomic, preceding The Clone Wars Season One episode "Rookies" and published on StarWars.com." It's kind of unclear in this sentance whether Rookiees or Mouse Hunt was published on Star Wars.com. You should put published on Star Wars.com right before the preceding Rookies part.
      • Done.
    • Other than that, nice job dude. Kilson Likes PIE 12:00, 24 July 09 (UTC)
  2. IFYLOFD:
    • Are CC-7567 and CC-2224's nicknames really necessary?
      • Yes. Both are mentioned more than twice, especially Rex.
    • Give context on alert code Aurek: What does it mean?
      • Actually, the source doesn't specify it all, it's only mentioned once. I could assume that it could possibly mean the highest alert, but I won't.
    • Other than that, looks clean. Very good job. IFYLOFD (You will pay the price for your lack of vision!) 23:11, 25 July 2009 (UTC)
  3. Before I get to anything else, "received his nickname because of the white-colored stripe" is pure speculation and does not belong on Wookieepedia. Graestan(Talk) 18:12, 29 July 2009 (UTC)
    • Can't say I didn't anticipate that. I believe it is not speculation for the following reason. Per WP:ATT "Editors may make straightforward logical deductions based on fully attributed data that neither change the significance of the data nor require additional assumptions beyond what is in the source. It should be possible for any reader without specialist knowledge to understand the deductions." When we see clone trooper CT-27-5555, it is obvious that he's nicknamed Fives because of numbers in his designations, although the source doesn't say that explicitly. When we see a clone with a white stripe (which is visually underlined several times in the comic) it is similarly obvious where he got his nickname from, without requiring any speculation. MauserComlink 20:52, 29 July 2009 (UTC)
      • With all due respect, Mauser, the origin of Fives' nickname was more directly confirmed than Stripe's. After CT-27-5555 stated his designation to Rex and Cody, Hevy said "We call him Fives," which was more of a hint at Fives' nickname than Stripe's. What if Stripe took it in honor of a fallen comrade and then dyed his hair? What if it was from a tattooed stripe on his arm? Yes, your conclusion is the most probable, but it's still not 100% confirmed. Per the "nor require additional assumptions beyond what is in the source," speculation is still required to deduce the source of the nickname. I'd feel better if it's the reader making the connection on his or her own rather than outright saying it. In any case, it's still not known whether Stripe "received the nickname" or took it himself. CC7567 (talk) 21:41, 3 August 2009 (UTC)
        • Okay, I'm convinced. Adressed. MauserComlink 08:04, 4 August 2009 (UTC)
  4. Attack of the Clone
    • "when the droid turned to be a shell for the droid's wheels": are you entirely sure of this? Yes, the wheels separated from the body, but I'd like to hear your reasoning.
      • The fact that the wheels tried to escape means they could act separately from Rodent's body. And it's not like in SW any separated droid part becomes an individual droid by default, it must have been specifically pre-constructed for this.
    • Please condense your information from "Rookies" or somehow rewrite it more in relation to Stripe. Stating all that stuff about "other clones" and then having to clarify later that Stripe is one of them is confusing.
      • Adressed.
    • Furthermore, why were they nicknamed "shinies"?
      • Removed "shinies" altogether by replacing it with a self-explaining "rookies" term.
    • Can you please clarify why all that Bts information is important enough to be mentioned in Stripe's article, particularly the part about Carlisle?
      • Funny, I have no problem with removing the "Carlisle" part, but I thought that explaining where "Pastil" comes from is important and you removed it altogether.
        • I must have removed it inadvertently; I've replaced it. CC7567 (talk) 22:58, 5 August 2009 (UTC)
    • Please be careful about the amount of detail you include next time. There was a lot of information that wasn't directly relevant to Stripe. CC7567 (talk) 20:56, 5 August 2009 (UTC)
      • Thanks for your review and copy-edit. MauserComlink 21:27, 5 August 2009 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 03:00, 16 August 2009 (UTC)