Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Starbound Misfit

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Starbound Misfit

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Support

  1. <-Omicron(Leave a message at the BEEP!) 22:51, August 1, 2014 (UTC)
  2. Good work. 501st dogma(talk) 14:26, August 2, 2014 (UTC)

Object

501st
  • Intro could stand some slight buffing in size.
  • It would be good to mention Corellian Engineering Corporation by name in the description, and not pipelink to it.
  • There's a bit of redundancy with the length, as you mention that it is 35 meters twice. I would kill the initial reference to it, and leave the one mentioning it in the modifications part.
  • It would be better if you mentioned the modifications last in the Description. Right now they are in the first paragraph, with the general description of the ship coming later on.
  • Backup hyperdrive rating needs to be mentioned in Description.
  • Description section needs to be fully sourced. Same with Owners.
    • Single source entries only need one reference per section, but I added the missing reference to Owners. --praguepride (Talk) 03:22, June 17, 2014 (UTC)
      • No, you need to source each paragraph. Currently you're only sourcing the last one.
  • "Like most YT series starships the Starbound Misfit was built around a central saucer. Unlike the more famous YT-1300 models the cockpit was centrally located between the two forward prongs of the ship." You got a reference for that? Does Scum and Villainy specifically mention this?
    • Reworded --praguepride (Talk) 03:22, June 17, 2014 (UTC)
      • You're still going to need a specific reference for the "Like most YT series..." part, unless it's stated in Scum. 501st dogma(talk) 13:46, June 19, 2014 (UTC)
  • Once you deal with these I'll look at it again. Good work. 501st dogma(talk) 20:45, June 16, 2014 (UTC)
  • Mind mentioning Scizzic outright in the intro?
  • Numbers lower than a hundred should be put in written form in the body. This mainly applies to the Description section, though you can leave decimal numbers (36.58) as is.
  • Context is needed for Lynnori in the body.
    • Done --praguepride (Talk) 00:20, June 24, 2014 (UTC)
      • I don't believe smuggler is the right context, as in the next section you have her only taking the occasional smuggling contract. Maybe use the "tramp freighter captain" contect from the intro. 501st dogma(talk) 00:43, June 24, 2014 (UTC)
  • Description: You say there are only 2 crew for the ship in the opening paragraph, but you go onto say that all 4 crew members can sit in the cockpit together. Which is correct?
  • "The bottom-right of the ship held one..." You shouldn't describe the ship as if you were looking down on it with out telling the reader. Right now, it is unclear where the bottom-right of the ship is. I would suggest using the "The starboard aft of the ship...." Make sure you remedy this for the rest of the Description as well.
  • Max atmospheric speed needs to be in Description.
  • The twin-linked guns fact has to be present in the Description too. 501st dogma(talk) 00:30, June 21, 2014 (UTC)
  • There's a bit of intro exclusive stuff about Lyroni using the ship whenever she could and liking the freedom. That should be added to the body somewhere.
  • I would suggest putting the info about the freezers and cargo bays together, instead of putting them in two separate sections. Something like :"At the aft of the ship, at either side, were located cargo bays and freezers for storage." Try to do this with the smuggling compartments and the escape pods too.
  • Context for the Battle of Yavin? 501st dogma(talk) 15:53, June 27, 2014 (UTC)
  • The Hyperdrive class of .05 is not referenced in the infobox.
  • In the Description, it being a Corellian Engineering make needs to be sourced to 1, and not 2 as it currently is. 501st dogma(talk) 17:35, July 9, 2014 (UTC)
  • One last thing: Pride, there's a minor discrepancy with dates I'd like you to fix. The intro has her flying it after 0 ABY, but the body has her "still using" it in 0 ABY. 501st dogma(talk) 23:49, August 1, 2014 (UTC)
Exiled Jedi
  • Does the source state that it only had one cargo bay, or could its hold be divided into multiple sections as appears to be the case in the diagram?
    • Source does not say cargo bay could be divided. It looks like the picture just points out a change in elevation. --praguepride (Talk) 17:08, August 10, 2014 (UTC)
      • Yes, but there are cargo bays on both sides of the ship that do not appear to be connected, so I don't think you can say it had "a cargo bay that could hold 200 tons." That makes it sound like there is a single cargo bay, which does not appear to be the case.--Exiled Jedi Oldrepublic crest (Greetings) 19:00, August 10, 2014 (UTC)
  • Please say how many crew cabins there were.
  • From the image it looks like the ship had two engines. Please mention this.
    • Already mentioned plural sublight drives. Without a better picture it's unknown how many actual engines there were on the ship. --praguepride (Talk) 17:08, August 10, 2014 (UTC)
  • Mentioning the Galactic Civil War does not give enough information to place the article in the Rebellion era.
    • It's after battle of yavin before Endor so Rebellion era. Added after the Battle of Yavin as that is the only actual time period you can discern directly from the source material. --praguepride (Talk) 17:08, August 10, 2014 (UTC)
  • The source mentions that Lynnori sometimes carried passengers on the ship.
  • You say "Twin fire-linked heavy laser cannons (fire-linked)" in the infobox. Saying fire-linked twice seems rather redundant.--Exiled Jedi Oldrepublic crest (Greetings) 16:34, August 9, 2014 (UTC)

Comments

Vote to remove nomination (AC only)

  1. ACvote Unaddressed objection over 2 weeks old. Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 00:33, August 26, 2014 (UTC)
  2. ACvote Exiled Jedi Oldrepublic crest (Greetings) 00:36, August 26, 2014 (UTC)
  3. ACvote IFYLOFD (Enter the Floydome) 02:09, August 26, 2014 (UTC)