Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Sta-Den Eekin/Legends

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Sta-Den Eekin

• Nominated by: Clone Commander Lee ^Talk 00:00, March 24, 2014 (UTC)
• Nomination comments: Next part of the Geonosis strike team project. I'll give you five bucks for every redirect you find.

(5 ACs/0 Users/5 Total)

Support

1. JangFett ^(Talk) 22:07, March 29, 2014 (UTC)
2. Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 19:55, April 14, 2014 (UTC)
3. 1358 ^(Talk) 21:32, April 14, 2014 (UTC)
4. CC7567 ^(talk) 15:55, April 16, 2014 (UTC)
5. MasterFred^(Whatever) 19:08, April 16, 2014 (UTC)

Object

Jangeth

• "In 22 BBY, Eekin joined a a task force consisting of 200 Jedi Knights that was sent to the planet Geonosis." It sounds like joined after it was sent to Geonosis. Is this correct?
  • Nah, corrected. Clone Commander Lee ^Talk 10:56, March 26, 2014 (UTC)
    • Still remains. JangFett ^(Talk) 18:45, March 26, 2014 (UTC)
      • I'm sorry, could you point out what is not correct? Clone Commander Lee ^Talk 14:24, March 27, 2014 (UTC)
        • I already did, Lee. Please read more carefully. JangFett ^(Talk) 23:27, March 27, 2014 (UTC)
• "Sta-Den Eekin was trained by the Jedi Order in the ways of the Force, eventually attaining the rank of Jedi Master" I realize that he had some sort of training, but this extrapolating practice from c. 2009 needs to stop. Unless the source mentioned his training, we shouldn't assume anything. What you could say is that he held the rank of Jedi Master in 22 BBY after you introduce his Force sensitive and gender in the bio.
  • Hope this is better now. Clone Commander Lee ^Talk 10:56, March 26, 2014 (UTC)
• Could you please link the strike team in the bio.
  • Linked. Clone Commander Lee ^Talk 10:56, March 26, 2014 (UTC)
• "Eekin fought on the top ranks of the tribune" Could you find another word to replace "ranks" here? JangFett ^(Talk) 02:04, March 26, 2014 (UTC)
  • I fear not, but I'll try to find another word. Thx for the review. Clone Commander Lee ^Talk 10:56, March 26, 2014 (UTC)
    • Okay, it still remains at the moment. JangFett ^(Talk) 18:45, March 26, 2014 (UTC)
      • Would "standings" be more suitable? Clone Commander Lee ^Talk 14:24, March 27, 2014 (UTC)
        • Anything other than rank. Make sure it flows, however. "Standings" may not work. JangFett ^(Talk) 19:10, March 28, 2014 (UTC)
          • Have a look. Clone Commander Lee ^Talk 23:29, March 28, 2014 (UTC)
• I've been meaning to ask you this: Could you please find a relevant image for this article and Stouff's? JangFett ^(Talk) 20:01, March 29, 2014 (UTC)
  • Added a photo of the arena and of Bulq for Stouff. Clone Commander Lee ^Talk 21:01, March 29, 2014 (UTC)

Toprawa

• I find the double mention of 22 BBY in such close proximity in the Biography to be very redundant. I'd rather see this sentence reworded to say something like "...Sta-Den Eekin was a Jedi Master who served the Galactic Republic." Then go into the 22 BBY year in the next sentence. The meaning is not lost: "A Force-sensitive male Klatooinian, Sta-Den Eekin had attained the rank of Jedi Master[3] by 22 BBY." Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 22:56, April 13, 2014 (UTC)
  • Better? Clone Commander Lee ^Talk 11:59, April 14, 2014 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 19:08, April 16, 2014 (UTC)