Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Space and Humanity

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Space and Humanity

  • Nominated by: DarthSkyll (talk) 23:53, 12 December 2023 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments:
  • Date Archived: 05:47, 28 December 2023 (UTC)
  • Final word count: 386 words (54 introduction, 297 body, 35 behind the scenes)
  • WookieeProject (optional): WP:Novels, WP:THR

(4 ACs/0 Users/4 Total)

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Support

  1. ACvote copy-edit —spookywillowwtalk 17:48, 20 December 2023 (UTC)
  2. ACvote Lewisr (talk) 22:36, 20 December 2023 (UTC)
  3. ACvote TanDivoInsignia-SenateMurders Anıl Şerifoğlu (talk) 00:13, 21 December 2023 (UTC)
  4. ACvote Master FredceriqueCommerce Guild(talk) (he/him) 05:46, 28 December 2023 (UTC)

Object

Fred strikes back
  • I'm loving seeing all these Silver Dawn nominations. Keep them coming!
    • There shouldn't be any links in quote attributions if those links also exist in the article prose.
    • Images should ideally be placed directly below quotes. Master FredceriqueCommerce Guild(talk) (he/him) 07:34, 13 December 2023 (UTC)
      • Thanks! I removed the links from the quote attribution and the image placement was already changed by someone else. DarthSkyll (talk) 12:01, 13 December 2023 (UTC)
spookly
  • Article should avoid conjunctions such as "couldn't" and always expand them out to "could not" (and etc, depending on which it is) per policy.
  • The article currently reads very play-by-play in its recounting of the conversation—this should be condensed a bit to focus more on actions rather than dialogue in full (similar to: "X and X conversed about Space and Humanity…) while only including the most relevant parts of what they say.
  • Mulling over what we normally do for IU published works and such, it would make sense if the leading sentence of the history introduced that Carl published the novel, and that Yu and Sean became familiar with it at some point (prior to the events in which both discuss it as if they know it).
  • Unless I'm misunderstanding due to the language swap, should Li not be referred to as Yu throughout, due to last name and such?—spookywillowwtalk 18:43, 15 December 2023 (UTC)
    • I changed the "didn't" to "did not" and I will keep that in mind for future edits. And I added to the history section that Mr. Carl had published the book.
    • I don't really understand what you mean by your second point, but I made a few changes. Could you check if it's okay now?
    • As far as I understand it, in the Aakaash system the surname always comes first. Nan Holi and Nan Qianyu for example are members of the Nan family. DarthSkyll (talk) 13:48, 16 December 2023 (UTC)
      • Makes sense, figured to check since it's a different language, for the surname part.
      • For the unstruck point, it would likely be reflected in something similar to (for the second sentence of History) "During the High Republic Era, the captain Li Yu and Jedi Master Mostima's Padawan, Sean, became familiar with Space and Humanity. In 200 BBY, Mostima and Sean…" The primary reason for this is because, due to their discussion, it becomes clear that both had some familiarity with the work prior to their meeting, which means that their having known about it should be presented chronolologically prior to 200 BBY. Then, after, it goes into the 200 BBY stuff.—spookywillowwtalk 01:42, 19 December 2023 (UTC)
        • I added that Sean became familiar with the book and that Li Yu designed his ship after the principles of the book in a sentence before the 200 BBY stuff. DarthSkyll (talk) 17:04, 19 December 2023 (UTC)
Lew
  • Think it would be worth trying to find a spot to split the history paragraph into 2 smaller ones Lewisr (talk) 01:35, 19 December 2023 (UTC)
    • I split it. I hope it's a good spot. DarthSkyll (talk) 17:04, 19 December 2023 (UTC)
      • Hmm I think splitting at 'Later, Li and Sean conversed about the Silver Dawn' might be better, what do you think? Lewisr (talk) 23:26, 19 December 2023 (UTC)
        • Yes, that's probably better. I changed it. DarthSkyll (talk) 11:17, 20 December 2023 (UTC)
          • Great thanks! Lewisr (talk) 22:36, 20 December 2023 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 05:46, 28 December 2023 (UTC)