Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Sonam-Ha'ar

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Sonam-Ha'ar

• Nominated by: IFYLOFD ^{(You will pay the price for your lack of vision!)} 03:20, October 31, 2009 (UTC)
• Nomination comments: He has a fine beard.

(3 ACs/2 Users/5 Total)

Support

1. Jedi Kasra (comlink) 01:16, November 2, 2009 (UTC)
2. Quixotic Jedi must be inspired in him. --Skippy Farlstendoiro 13:42, November 2, 2009 (UTC)
3. Ronnie Brown would be impressed. Chack Jadson ^(Talk) 22:07, November 16, 2009 (UTC)
4. Jonjedigrandmaster ^{(Jedi Beacon)} 03:25, November 20, 2009 (UTC)
5. CC7567 ^(talk) 04:48, November 22, 2009 (UTC)

Object

1. Just a couple…
   • What are the species of these Jedi? Memit Nadill, Odan-Urr.
     • I don't think its really relevant.
       • Alright, then.--Jedi Kasra (comlink) 01:16, November 2, 2009 (UTC)
   • In the Appearances section, could you only put the comics in which he actually appeared, rather that the overall arc?
     • Addressed.
   • Otherwise, looks good.--Jedi Kasra (comlink) 15:35, November 1, 2009 (UTC)
2. The Grand Master
   • "with a seemingly unstoppable invasion force." Seemingly unstopable? Well, was it or wasn't it?
     • I used the word seemingly there because it seemed to the Jedi that it was unstoppable, but it turned out not to be.
   • "Taking the oportunity..." and "Seeing an opportunity..." What opportunity did he take/see? (i.e. something along the lines of "Taking advantage of the opportunity" and "Seeing an opportunity to turn the tide of the battle")
     • Addressed.
   • "stood by his side no matter what." Could this be worded any differently? It sounds a little colloquial, and like it might be overstated.
     • Addressed.
   • Does the source literally call him "brave?" If not, this is a pretty generic statement, as you can pretty much say that every being in the Star Wars universe was brave because they did something.
     • Reworded.
   • Jonjedigrandmaster ^{(Jedi Beacon)} 01:36, November 16, 2009 (UTC)
3. "Pledging that the Jedi would help in the coming battle, Sonam-Ha'ar began preparing for battle": please vary "battle" somehow here and throughout this entire paragraph. CC7567 ^(talk) 21:09, November 21, 2009 (UTC)
   • Addressed.

Comments

Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 04:48, November 22, 2009 (UTC)