Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Skosef

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Skosef

  • Nominated by: 501st dogma(talk) 20:17, October 19, 2012 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: The main quote of this guy drew me to nom him.

(3 ACs/3 Users/6 Total)

Support

  1. Nothing I can find. Commander Code-8 To say hi, press 42 08:22, November 9, 2012 (UTC)
  2. Sorry it took so long. Forgot to finish up. :P MasterFredCommerce Guild(Whatever) 03:23, November 15, 2012 (UTC)
  3. ACvote Cavalier OneFarStar(Squadron channel) 15:13, November 29, 2012 (UTC)
  4. Exiled Jedi Oldrepublic crest (Greetings) 03:07, December 13, 2012 (UTC)
  5. ACvote Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 02:37, December 17, 2012 (UTC)
  6. ACvote JangFett (Talk) 18:35, December 17, 2012 (UTC)

Object

Fred strikes
  • In the attribution for the main quote, please give a little more context for "the shuttle." Perhaps put the name instead? The reader has no idea what "the shuttle" is yet.
    • Is that better?
      • Eh, I'd say something more like, "after a successful attempt to bomb Palpatine's shuttle." It just kinda reads weird to me the other way.
        • Added. 501st dogma(talk) 00:32, October 22, 2012 (UTC)
  • The first sentence of the second paragraph of his bio is a run-on, and the second half doesn't make sense. In fact, I'd say describing the entire plan is not necessary. Only the part that directly related to Skosef.
    • Changed.
      • Better.
  • Context for Bartam in the last paragraph of the bio. You've only mentioned his apartment before, and we have no idea who this person is.
    • He is already mentioned as one of the conspirators.
      • Ah, my apologies. You are correct. :P
  • Made a few minor changes you need to check. I'll continue the review later. MasterFredCommerce Guild(Whatever) 18:51, October 21, 2012 (UTC)
Cav
  • Second Officer Dezsetes - Second Officer of what?
    • Better?
  • discussed Trachta's plan on how to kill the Sith - I think a full explanation of the actual plotis needed for context.
    • That better? I removed it as it was one of Fred's objections, but it's back now.
      • Although I understood the general gist of the section, some of it was a little confusing to me, and off chronologically. I rewrote a section of it to flow better. Take a look at it and make sure it is still accurate and amend as necessary.
        • That looks good.
  • You mention Skosef was to assassinate the Emperor, then mention the attempt would kill Royal Guards and stormtroopers as a necessary part of the plan. Only in the next paragraph is it revealed that the conspirators did not expect the assassination attempt to work. I think some more explanation is required in the second paragraph to cover this.
    • Done, me thinks.
  • Any explanation on how the bombing was traced back to Skosef?
    • There was none given.
  • As the members of the conspiracy struggled for power among one another, - what caused this?
    • There.
  • Skosef was to carry out the killing of Bartam. - if they're all struggling for power, why did Skosef follow orders to kill Bartam as this suggests? - Cavalier OneFarStar(Squadron channel) 12:29, October 31, 2012 (UTC)
    • Better? Thanks for looking it over. 501st dogma(talk) 21:06, October 31, 2012 (UTC)
  • One more - At the presentation of the stormtroopers, loyal to the conspirators, to replace the troopers killed in the bombing, - presented to whom? - Cavalier OneFarStar(Squadron channel) 10:20, November 13, 2012 (UTC)
    • That clear things up? 501st dogma(talk) 21:45, November 14, 2012 (UTC)
Exiled Jedi
  • You could mention in the P&T that he owned a blaster pistol.
    • Added.
  • Please mention his skin color in the infobox.
    • There.
  • Please mention that Bartam's apartment was on Coruscant in the Biography section.--Exiled Jedi Oldrepublic crest (Greetings) 20:14, December 12, 2012 (UTC)
    • It's already there. Thanks for looking it over. 501st dogma(talk) 00:01, December 13, 2012 (UTC)
Toprawa
  • If there is no article already, please create one and link appropriately for Palpatine's shuttle. I'm guessing, since this shuttle was destroyed, that this article should be different than Emperor Palpatine's shuttle. Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 22:02, December 16, 2012 (UTC)
    • Created and linked to. 501st dogma(talk) 01:39, December 17, 2012 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 18:35, December 17, 2012 (UTC)