Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Skirmish in the Tingel Arm

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Skirmish in the Tingel Arm

• Nominated by: Darth Trayus^{(Trayus Academy)} 04:47, January 25, 2010 (UTC)
• Nomination comments: This is gonna be first in a line of several

(3 ACs/2 Users/5 Total)

Support

1. Jonjedigrandmaster ^{(Jedi Beacon)} 23:09, January 29, 2010 (UTC)
2. CC7567 ^(talk) 20:40, January 31, 2010 (UTC)
3. Kreivi Wolter 21:42, January 31, 2010 (UTC)
4. Toprawa and Ralltiir 23:59, February 4, 2010 (UTC)
5. JMAS ^{Hey, it's me!} 00:46, February 5, 2010 (UTC)

Object

1. The Grand Master
   • "After hiding in the Unknown Regions for centuries following their defeat in the Great Hyperspace War, the Sith rebuilt and readied for war against the Republic." Rebuilt what?
     • Addressed.
   • The prelude currently makes it sound as if the Sith Empire is still under the same Dark Lord as the one that had commanded it during the Great Hyperspace War, only now he is known as the Sith Emperor. Since this remains unknown, could you perhaps tweak this a bit?
     • Addressed, I hope.
       • Actually, I was referring more to this one: "In 3,681 BBY, the Dark Lord, now known as the Sith Emperor, believed his preparations..." "The Dark Lord" sounds like you're referring to the Dark Lord you previously mentioned.
         • Ah I see. Check it out now. Darth Trayus^{(Trayus Academy)} 23:04, January 29, 2010 (UTC)
           • Eh, that's not the one I meant lol. Don't worry, I took care of it :). Jonjedigrandmaster ^{(Jedi Beacon)} 23:09, January 29, 2010 (UTC)
             • Ahaha sorry, and thanks for fixing it.
   • As a note, there was some underlinking in the article. I took care of this in my copy-edit, but please make sure that you have everything linked in the future. Otherwise, good work. :) Jonjedigrandmaster ^{(Jedi Beacon)} 21:54, January 26, 2010 (UTC)
     • Darn. My apologies, and I'll keep it in mind in the future. Thanks for the review! Darth Trayus^{(Trayus Academy)} 22:54, January 29, 2010 (UTC)
2. Toprawa:
   • You refer previously to a convoy of diplomats, as in plural diplomats, but here you refer to some singular diplomat's transport. Either this is meant to be "diplomats' transport," or you need to do a better job of explaining who this is and what is going on here. "The diplomat's transport" Toprawa and Ralltiir 21:23, February 4, 2010 (UTC)
     • Addressed. —Unsigned comment by Dark Lord Trayus (talk • contribs)

Comments

Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 00:51, February 5, 2010 (UTC)

• Spoiler, I guess? Also, this will include the Great Galactic War template when I've finished filling it the redlinks on it. Darth Trayus^{(Trayus Academy)} 04:47, January 25, 2010 (UTC)