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Siene Symm

  • Nominated by: Skippy Farlstendoiro 10:50, December 29, 2009 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: Go, Nien Nunb-lookalike from 1988!

(3 ACs/2 Users/5 Total)

Support

  1. --Jawaman No, I did NOT steal your droid! 15:51, December 31, 2009 (UTC)
  2. ACvote Chack Jadson (Talk) 16:40, January 17, 2010 (UTC)
  3. SoresuMakashi(Everything I tell you is the truth) 22:24, February 16, 2010 (UTC)
  4. ACvote Toprawa and Ralltiir 19:08, March 6, 2010 (UTC)
  5. ACvote CC7567 (talk) 18:48, March 8, 2010 (UTC)

Object

  1. The intro needs an expansion. I'm sure there's info to add to it. Chack Jadson (Talk) 02:01, January 7, 2010 (UTC)
  2. "Also during this mission, Symm and the others in the Long Shot discovered that General Reekeene had been captured by Imperial forces and sent to the planet Flankers, whose sun would go nova in only hours. Symm piloted the Long Shot and fought the Imperials' defenses." Where did he fight the Imperials? I assume it's Flankers, but that info should be added in so this sentence doesn't stand out so much. Chack Jadson (Talk) 17:07, January 10, 2010 (UTC)
    • Have a look.--Skippy Farlstendoiro 12:16, January 11, 2010 (UTC)
      • I still feel that it's not as clear as it could be. "Wanting to save her, the crew of the Long Shot went to Flankers. Symm piloted the Long Shot and fought the Imperials' defenses. Later, a Squad was sent to rescue Reekeene; Symm kept them informed about the time they had before the impending doom." You seem to say that they went to Flankers to save her twice ("Wanting to save her, the crew of the Long Shot went to Flankers" and "Later, a Squad was sent to rescue Reekeene."). One of those is not needed, unless I am interpreting it wrong. Also, could you add "above Flankers" or whatever to the end of "Imperials' defenses?" Chack Jadson (Talk) 16:06, January 17, 2010 (UTC)
  3. Soresu should've gotten to this earlier, but better late then never, he says
    • Newbie is mostly gaming slang, please find a synonym.
      • Done.
    • The Empire did not know that the Long Shot was a Rebel ship, but they could discover it should they find the Long Shot there. Unclear. Discover is a synonym of find, you are basically saying they could find it should they find it. Please reword.
      • Done.
    • Again, paragraphing is a problem. I understand that some events may not be hugely related, but you must stay consistent with other GAs. The ones that I think could be merged are the first and last two of the bio, and last three of the P&T, as they are at least lightly linked to each other. SoresuMakashi(Everything I tell you is a lie) 11:14, February 16, 2010 (UTC)
  4. Toprawa:
    • As far as I can see, the Green Squad article you link to in this article does not represent the subject you're intending to refer to. You may need to readjust your linking and even create a new article for this specific Green Squad. Toprawa and Ralltiir 23:53, March 5, 2010 (UTC)
    • Also, for your future reference, The Long Shot Campaign qualifies as an Appearance rather than a Source, per this community decision. I know I asked you about this once before, but I had a look at the material myself just now because I wasn't convinced myself. Please remember to adjust any future nominations. Toprawa and Ralltiir 00:11, March 6, 2010 (UTC)
  5. Can his homeworld be clarified right from the start in the intro and bio? It's currently intro-exclusive information for the most part, as the mention in the body comes rather late. CC7567 (talk) 03:11, March 8, 2010 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 18:48, March 8, 2010 (UTC)