Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Shar Dakhan

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Shar Dakhan

• Nominated by: IFYLOFD ^{(You will pay the price for your lack of vision!)} 02:47, November 4, 2009 (UTC)
• Nomination comments: Heh. I was worried that I couldn't get this over 250 words.

(3 ACs/2 Users/5 Total)

Support

1. Nostalgia.—Tommy9281 ^{(No truth in me)} 05:24, November 13, 2009 (UTC)
2. Farl got everything I came up with already. SoresuMakashi^{(Everything I tell you is the truth)} 11:02, November 13, 2009 (UTC)
3. For Sandokan! --Skippy Farlstendoiro 11:21, November 13, 2009 (UTC)
4. Jonjedigrandmaster ^{(Jedi Beacon)} 17:37, November 30, 2009 (UTC)
5. --Eyrezer 01:41, December 1, 2009 (UTC)

Object

1. For Farlstendoiro!
   • No quotes? Rewording: As there are quotes available, would you consider adding one or more?
     • Quotes added.
   • ..."ruled over the world of Ch'hodos, which served as his central base,[1] located in the northern part of the Unknown Regions...[2]" I understand you want to reduce footnotes to a minimum, which is laudable, but I suggest rewording this sentence, as it seems that "his base is located in the northern part".
     • Addressed.
   • "were repelled and eventually defeated." This seems important, do we know any details? Battle, opposing commanders, anything?
     • Entire end of the bio has been changed.
   • Shar Dakhan? Related to San Dokan? --Skippy Farlstendoiro 07:20, November 4, 2009 (UTC)
2. Tommy:
   • It appears that Shar Dakhan led the assault on Coruscant, so you might want to expand the article to reflect this.
     • Yeah, addressed.
   • To touch on Skippy's point above, there are quotes, as found in First Encounter.
     • Addressed.
   • As usual, there is some underlinking. A Wookieepedian of your caliber should not have to be reminded repeatedly of things like this. Please address.
     • Addressed.
   • That's all.—Tommy9281 ^{(No truth in me)} 16:00, November 6, 2009 (UTC)
3. It isn't clear in the intro who wins the Battle of Coruscant: "Dakhan's forces were opposed by a numerically inferior group of Jedi and Republic soldiers, but they were defeated." "They" could refer to either group: please specify. Jonjedigrandmaster ^{(Jedi Beacon)} 22:40, November 13, 2009 (UTC)
   • Addressed.
4. One more: "Dakhan later accompanied Sadow's invasion force in the Great Hyperspace War, and personally commanded the Sith attack on the Republic capital of Coruscant. Sadow demanded that Dakhan and the Sith force capture Coruscant..." The chronology here seems to be out of order. You say that he personally commanded the attack, and then you say that Sadow ordered him to attack. Jonjedigrandmaster ^{(Jedi Beacon)} 15:16, November 22, 2009 (UTC)
   • Addressed. IFYLOFD ^{(You will pay the price for your lack of vision!)} 23:58, November 29, 2009 (UTC)
5. Is there a ref missing in the first sentence of the Bio? Surely that is not all from the Altas. --Eyrezer 03:10, November 23, 2009 (UTC)
   • My mistake. Addressed. IFYLOFD ^{(You will pay the price for your lack of vision!)} 23:58, November 29, 2009 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 03:02, December 1, 2009 (UTC)

• Could you make an article for Dakhan's fortress on Ch'hodos? Jonjedigrandmaster ^{(Jedi Beacon)} 17:37, November 30, 2009 (UTC)
• Just a heads up: Shar Dakhan was recently mentioned in the Crosscurrent excerpt on Random House's website, located here. The relevant information should be added to the article. Xicer9^(Combadge) 22:02, November 30, 2009 (UTC)