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Search for Mandalore's Mask

(3 ACs/2 Users/5 Total)

Support

  1. Providing all objections are satisfied. Supreme Emperor (talk) 21:29, April 25, 2013 (UTC)
  2. ACvote IFYLOFD (Enter the Floydome) 23:39, May 17, 2013 (UTC)
  3. ACvote Winterz (talk) 01:03, May 19, 2013 (UTC)
  4. Commander Code-8 G'day, mate 09:22, May 19, 2013 (UTC)
  5. ACvote Good work. JangFett (Talk) 14:31, May 24, 2013 (UTC)

Object

Floyd
  • First off: Intro has to be shortened considerably. Way out of proportion. Do this and I'll take a closer look. IFYLOFD (Floyd's crib) 02:14, March 25, 2013 (UTC)
Winterz
  • What I asked you to do in the Skirmish on Rekkiad related to this one, will certainly make you expand the Search article furthermore and a section for the battles, that occurred during it, would also be good. Winterz (talk) 15:08, April 3, 2013 (UTC)
  • In the infobox you have "24 casualties" for Clan Jendri but that's just what we know from one battle. I think you should use "At least 24" instead.
    • Clan Jendri only participated in the first skirmish, after that they were never seen/mentioned. I think it's fine the way it is since it does cover what we know, however if you think different I can change it.
  • Participants section would be great ;)
    • Added known participants.
  • You should try and cut down the Aftermath's quote a bit, it's really huge. Whatever you cut should instead be well specified in the text below the quote hence expanding the Aftermath's body making it bigger than the actual quote. Winterz (talk) 11:33, April 16, 2013 (UTC)
Ecks Dee
  • Alphabetize your categories.
    • Done.
  • Is there a particular reason for the capitalization of the "The Search" section? If the title is conjectural, I don't think 'search' should be capitalized either. 1358 (Talk) 21:05, March 25, 2013 (UTC)
  • If the title is conjecctural, you probably shouldn't start the intro with "The search", as that makes it sound like the title is canonical ("The battle of Geonosis" vs. "A battle on Geonosis" for example) 1358 (Talk) 19:20, April 14, 2013 (UTC)
CC-8
  • Can you put background context in for things like why the mask was so important and that Revan was the ne who hid it in the prelude.
    • Added.
      • His redemption should be worth a quick mention as well, and he needs to be linked to in the first time he is mentionedIn
  • Any quotes for the search section and/or its subheadings?
    • Added.
  • Context for Malak in that section
  • Added.
  • When you mention the six guys getting to the basilisks you make it sound like like they haven't been introduced, fix please.
    • Fixed.
  • Context for the twin spears
    • Added.
  • Veela revealed that she knew Revan's identity you need to say earlier that Revan was using an alias or something
    • Added.
  • Some images of Revan or Mandalore wearing his mask wouldn't hurt. Commander Code-8 G'day, mate 06:29, May 13, 2013 (UTC)
Floyd
  • Ditch the list of participants. Those are things we actively try to eliminate throughout the wiki. I know Winterz asked for it, but he was wrong to.
    • Removed.
  • "A search for Mandalore's Mask was a mission undertaken in 3,954 BBY by the surviving Mandalorian clans, leftover from the Mandalorian Wars, gathered on the planet Rekkiad to search for the ancient ceremonial war mask, Mandalore's Mask." The double "search for Mandalore's Mask" is unnecessary here. Change the sentence around.
    • Changed.
  • Context on Canderous Ordo in both the intro and body.
    • Added.
  • Intro: Context on the Twin Spears.
    • Added.
  • First sentence of the Prelude has two sections surrounded by dashes in it. This has to be changed as it's bad for flow.
    • Changed up.
      • The way you have it now, the Mandalore's Mask is mentioned before it's actually introduced: "where Jedi Knights Revan and Malak hid Mandalore's Mask six years earlier, to search for the ancient ceremonial war mask, Mandalore's Mask," It's probably best to just split this sentence up and try to get it straightened out. IFYLOFD (Enter the Floydome) 03:25, May 17, 2013 (UTC)
  • The whole description of the skirmish in the tomb is too play-by-play.
    • Changed.
  • You start calling the Mandalorians "Mandos" towards the very end. That's fine, but if you're going to do this, you should integrate this throughout the entire article and give a little context on the term's meaning. IFYLOFD (Enter the Floydome) 04:04, May 16, 2013 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 14:31, May 24, 2013 (UTC)