Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Scupper Bantoo

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Scupper Bantoo

(3 ACs/2 Users/5 Total)

Support

  1. —Master Jonathan(Jedi Council Chambers) 21:23, 12 June 2009 (UTC)
  2. Good work. Jonjedigrandmaster (Jujiggum) 21:31, 14 June 2009 (UTC)
  3. ACvote CC7567 (talk) 19:12, 15 June 2009 (UTC)
  4. ACvote Grunny (Talk) 03:52, 17 June 2009 (UTC)
  5. ACvote Cylka-talk- 00:22, 19 June 2009 (UTC)

Object

  1. From the Council Chambers:
    • "Both Macatten and her former master attempted to keep the ship moderately up to date, but the model was considered obsolete by 12 BBY,": This sentence in the intro suggests that Macatten obtained the ship before it became obsolete in 12 BBY. However, the second sentence in the "History" section states that it became obsolete in 12 BBY while her master still had possession of it. Please clarify.
      • Reworked it a little.
    • Great job. —Master Jonathan(Jedi Council Chambers) 19:00, 11 June 2009 (UTC)
  2. The Grand Master
    • Intro is too long compared to the body; please try to cut it down some.
      • Trimmed down.
    • "When he was killed by an Aing-Tii ship while on a trading expedition..." He was killed by an Aing-Tii ship? This doesn't make sense; was he killed by a group of Aing-Tii? Was he shot down in a ship by Aing-Tii? The way you have it written iimplies that a ship randomly killed him. (I don't think this needs a lot of context, just enough info to clarify.)
      • The source text states "when her master was slain by an Aing-Tii ship while on a trading junket." That's all the information there is, and I tried to word it so that there is no speculation. While one would assume he was on a ship for this to have happened, it doesn't explicitly state this as fact.
    • I found that Kathol Outback redirects to Kathol sector, so I removed the extra link. However, as this means that they are the same thing, I would suggest picking one to use in the article for consistency, otherwise you might confuse the reader by changing back and forth.
      • The Kathol sector and the Kathol Outback are technically two distinct areas of space, clearly defined within the DarkStryder Campaign framework. Although this wiki has one redirecting to the other, I will be separating the two and rewriting the articles. This is just planning ahead by having the links ready. - Cavalier OneFarStar(Squadron channel) 21:24, 14 June 2009 (UTC)
    • Jonjedigrandmaster (Jujiggum) 22:03, 12 June 2009 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 00:23, 19 June 2009 (UTC)