Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Schenor

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Schenor

  • Nominated by: jSarek 10:05, November 20, 2009 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: Eyrezer has been pressuring me for a while to nom this. Well, finally, enough redlinks have been knocked out to give it a go.

(3 ACs/2 Users/5 Total)

Support

  1. I salute you to the stupendous sub-sphere of species beginning with an S. --Skippy Farlstendoiro 12:04, November 20, 2009 (UTC)
  2. Meow. ~ SavageBob 17:22, November 21, 2009 (UTC)
  3. Inqvote --Eyrezer 20:14, November 22, 2009 (UTC)
  4. ACvote CC7567 (talk) 20:43, November 22, 2009 (UTC)
  5. ACvote Jonjedigrandmaster (Jedi Beacon) 13:59, November 23, 2009 (UTC)

Object

  1. Skippy understands your plight
    • Scientific name is only given in the intro. No information should be only in the intro.
      • Fixed.
    • Society: "Martial arts" could be linked to unarmed combat.
      • We should probably have a separate martial art article, but this will do.
    • Society: Context for Rhamsis Callo in the body (not the introduction). Simply "The architecture on their homeworld, Rhamsis Callo,"
      • Addressed.
    • History: "However" is used twice in consecutive sentences.
      • Fixed.
    • History: Was the Schenor research station manned by Imps or by Schenors? Were the mercenaries locals or aliens? Who sent them? (Tell the reader even if the fighters did not know at that point). Context to that part, please.
      • First part is answered. The second and third parts aren't really discussed in the adventure, other than the mercenaries are a "motley" group and they are picked up by an Imperial gunboat, suggesting Imperial ties.
    • Hist: "they are not seeking" - Should be in past tense. Check all the text to confirm there's nothing else in wrong tense.
      • Fixed. Didn't notice any other present tense mistakes, but I missed THAT one in the first place, so who knows ...
    • Eyrezer also used that tactic with me. --Skippy Farlstendoiro 10:25, November 20, 2009 (UTC)
      • He certainly can be persuasive, can't he? jSarek 11:56, November 20, 2009 (UTC)
  2. Prepare to be savaged...
    • I think the article's mostly fine, but there are some things that should maybe be linked and stubbed but aren't: felinoid, ground-effect vehicle. If you're feeling really ambitions, you could stub the unidentified Imperial commander and the Galactic Empire–Rhamis Call treaty. :)
    • The infobox converts their height to metric, but the main article includes it in Imperial measurements. Can this be standardized? Either way, you should indicate somewhere that the original adventure uses Imperial.
      • Text references now metric; I think the existing quote in the Bts establishes the adventure uses Imperial measurement.
    • Is it possible to speculate a range of dates in which this adventure might have taken place based on the fact that Luke is a commander?
      • Broadly; Skywalker was promoted shortly after the evacuation of Yavin, and the adventure refers to Rebels, indicating it ended before Endor. Note in this vein has been added.
    • The young ones are called "hatchlings?" Do they hatch from eggs, or is just a name? Either way, this should probably be mentioned in the "Society and culture" section.
      • The term is used only once without elaboration, so I can't say for sure they hatch from eggs, but it seems likely given the lack of any other reason to use the term that I can think of. I added a note about it to the "Biology and appearance" section, since hints of oviparous reproduction seem more relevant in that section.
    • Much of the "History" section should probably be between {{RPG}} and {{Endgame}} templates. Nice work!
      • Ugh, hate those templates. Oh well, added where appropriate. jSarek 07:43, November 21, 2009 (UTC)

~ SavageBob 16:40, November 20, 2009 (UTC)

Comments

  • Is there a specific reason on why the scientific name is in the body but not the intro? CC7567 (talk) 20:43, November 22, 2009 (UTC)
    • It didn't seem like the sort of thing that needed to be in the article twice, and Skippy pointed out in his objection above that it couldn't stand alone in the introduction. jSarek 09:32, November 23, 2009 (UTC)