Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Sander Delvardus

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Sander Delvardus

  • Nominated by: Chack Jadson (Talk) 21:00, April 23, 2010 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: The best of the Darksaber warlords.

(3 ACs/3 Users/6 Total)

Support

  1. Nice. Xicer9Atgar(Combadge) 04:44, April 24, 2010 (UTC)
  2. -- 1358 (Talk) 05:06, April 24, 2010 (UTC)
  3. Inqvote IFYLOFD (Floyd's crib) 21:12, April 25, 2010 (UTC)
  4. After all, maybe Sovv was alone but he bluffed and Delvardus ordered his fleet to retreat. Nah!--Skippy Farlstendoiro 09:40, April 27, 2010 (UTC)
  5. ACvote CC7567 (talk) 20:38, May 1, 2010 (UTC)
  6. ACvote Toprawa and Ralltiir 20:20, May 4, 2010 (UTC)

Object

  1. "He was very confident in himself, and despite being outmanned and outgunned by the New Republic, believed that he would be able to defeat the New Republic." Maybe reword one of those New Republics. --Imperialles 22:16, April 23, 2010 (UTC)
  2. Floyd:
    • Context on the Eriadu Authority in the intro.
    • Intro: Add a little context on Palpatine's rebirth, and add it again later in the body.
    • Context on Sien Sovv.
    • Is there a link on the desert world Delvardus used after Palpatine's final death? If so, link it, if not create it.
    • That's all. Not bad. IFYLOFD (Floyd's crib) 21:39, April 24, 2010 (UTC)
  3. Farlstendoiro
    • No possible opening quote for the Biography?
    • "He was able to claim the Rimma Trade Route from Eriadu to Yag'Dhul, although it was not long before he lost the approval of the ruling families on Eriadu, as Delvardus sought to invade the Core, whereas the families were merely content for him to defend the Eriadu system." This sentence is quite long and offers four important sub-sentences. I suggest you to reorder the sub-sentences and divide the sentence in two or three.
    • Context on the battle of Sullust. Simply Sovv's affiliation would be enough but, reading it, I thought Sovv single-handed defeated Delvardus in a Starkiller-like way.
      • I'd like to add "being defeated by Sullustan forces led by Sien Sovv," but EA doesn't specify that. It's highly unlikely that Sovv defeated him in a one-on-one battle, but the source doesn't confirm that it involved anyone other than Sovv and Delvardus. It also gives no context on Sovv other than his species (his affiliation and rank are unspecified, I believe). Chack Jadson (Talk) 20:32, April 26, 2010 (UTC)
        • The map on page 196 shows it to be an NR battle and Delvardus' entry calls it an NR world. There's also mention of Sullustan forces going after him. - Lord Hydronium 10:17, April 27, 2010 (UTC)
          • After consideration, added a few words about the New Republic defending the planet. Chack Jadson (Talk) 00:31, May 1, 2010 (UTC)
    • Context on Operation Shadow Hand
    • Five sources are not referenced in footnotes. Confirm that you checked all of them only to find no new information
      • Checked at nomination, and there's nothing new.
    • Next: Yzu! Right?Skippy Farlstendoiro 07:28, April 26, 2010 (UTC)
  4. Toprawa:
    • Kindly kill the intro redlink.
    • Where is his fortress at, specifically? Please name the planet/location: "She traveled to Delvardus's fortress"
    • I'm a bit confused here. Is "the meeting" meant to refer to the meeting in which Delvardus was killed? Please specify: "and a holocube containing a recording of the meeting outside his fortress" Toprawa and Ralltiir 01:19, May 4, 2010 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 20:20, May 4, 2010 (UTC)