- The following discussion is preserved as an archive of a good article nomination that was successful. Please do not modify it.
Salissian
- Nominated by: --Eyrezer 14:19, April 4, 2010 (UTC)
- Nomination comments: I kinda feel sorry for them...
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Cavalier One
(Squadron channel) 20:28, April 4, 2010 (UTC)- Jonjedigrandmaster
(We seed the stars) 23:07, April 4, 2010 (UTC) - ~ SavageBob 05:14, April 5, 2010 (UTC)
- CC7567 (talk) 06:40, April 5, 2010 (UTC)
- --Skippy Farlstendoiro 11:12, April 5, 2010 (UTC)
- SoresuMakashi(Everything I tell you is the truth) 07:29, April 12, 2010 (UTC)
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- Soresu
These, and two others he killed, before slowly being overwhelmed by Confederacy forces. Sounds a little wierd when reading it quickly. Reword.- Got that during my copy-edit; we edit-conflicted. :P Jonjedigrandmaster (We seed the stars) 23:09, April 4, 2010 (UTC)
- Heh :D SoresuMakashi(Everything I tell you is a lie) 23:13, April 4, 2010 (UTC)
- Got that during my copy-edit; we edit-conflicted. :P Jonjedigrandmaster
Three members of the Salissian special forces What are the Salissian special forces? Some organisation?SoresuMakashi(Everything I tell you is a lie) 23:08, April 4, 2010 (UTC)- I've linked to special forces. There is no real info provided on them. Presumably they were mercenaries with better training... --Eyrezer 06:09, April 5, 2010 (UTC)
- As it is, the Salissian special forces sounds like the official name of an organisation; due to its naming, it would need an article regardless of the amount of info available. If it's not an actual name then could you reword it into something like a special force of Salissians, to make it unspecific?
- Red-linked instead. --Eyrezer 06:11, April 8, 2010 (UTC)
- As it is, the Salissian special forces sounds like the official name of an organisation; due to its naming, it would need an article regardless of the amount of info available. If it's not an actual name then could you reword it into something like a special force of Salissians, to make it unspecific?
- I've linked to special forces. There is no real info provided on them. Presumably they were mercenaries with better training... --Eyrezer 06:09, April 5, 2010 (UTC)
- Prepare to be savaged...
They're apparently ugly? Maybe this should be under "Appearance and biology," which is currently empty? It is probably also worth adding an A&B section that says that they are mainline Humans biologically. ~ SavageBob 04:16, April 5, 2010 (UTC)- I actually think the ugly comment refers to their demeanor, not their appearance. It picks up where the lead quote ends. --Eyrezer 04:58, April 5, 2010 (UTC)
"Ji, as a former Teräs Käsi champion, was a deadly melee fighter, before working as a combat instructor for the Republic." The chronology is unclear here; you're saying that he is a fighter and yet before worked as a combat instructor for the Republic, and the sentence is overall rather choppy.CC7567 (talk) 05:27, April 5, 2010 (UTC)- Unchopified. --Eyrezer 06:09, April 5, 2010 (UTC)
Comments
Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 07:34, April 12, 2010 (UTC)