Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Saato

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Saato

  • Nominated by: AmazinglyCool Nightsisters symbol - JFO (talk) 19:26, 20 July 2023 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments:
  • Date Archived: 19:18, 20 September 2023 (UTC)
  • Final word count: 917 words (94 introduction, 671 body, 152 behind the scenes)
  • WookieeProject (optional): WP:CIS, WP:VG

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Support

  1. ACvote Lewisr (talk) 16:24, 30 August 2023 (UTC)
  2. ACvote —spookywillowwtalk 06:32, 5 September 2023 (UTC)
  3. ACvote Nice work TanDivoInsignia-SenateMurders Anıl Şerifoğlu (talk) 18:06, 6 September 2023 (UTC)
  4. CIS will take over. Erebus Chronus (Talk) 01:37, 10 September 2023 (UTC)
  5. Booply (talk) 12:59, 11 September 2023 (UTC)
  6. Panther436 (talk) 19:01, 20 September 2023 (UTC)

Object

Anil
  • (Reviewing note) As Wookieepedia articles are presented as historical recordings per the Manual of Style, it'd be best not to use informal spellings of words such as "thru."
  • Does The New Essential Chronology directly date Saato's death to 21.17 BBY? If not, a reference note is needed for the death date in the infobox.
    • It does.
  • Isn't Bellek's farmstead notable enough for its own article?
  • In BTS, it'd be probably better to clarify who the player character is instead of just saying "you." TanDivoInsignia-SenateMurders Anıl Şerifoğlu (talk) 23:36, 24 July 2023 (UTC)
  • One last thing: Does the game actually establish she was part of the Separatist army or does she only command a group of battle droids during the Tatooine mission? If it's the latter, I think it'd be best to remove the Droid Army affiliation from the infobox, but the former would also warrant Category:Separatist Droid Army personnel? TanDivoInsignia-SenateMurders Anıl Şerifoğlu (talk) 14:30, 6 September 2023 (UTC)
    • It's the latter, so I removed it from the infobox. AmazinglyCool Nightsisters symbol - JFO (talk) 17:11, 6 September 2023 (UTC)
Lew
  • The affiliations should be in chronological order rather than alphabetical
  • Is she actually affiliated with Jabba's criminal empire? I think it might be better to remove it from the infobox and just stick with what you have in the body
  • The intro states she left to join Dooku as a Dark Acolyte during the war, but the body says before the war, which is the case?Lewisr (talk) 15:20, 6 August 2023 (UTC)
  • The first paragraph of 'Search for Raala Ponchar' has two consecutive refs to the same source, you'll need to investigate and fix Lewisr (talk) 02:39, 8 August 2023 (UTC)
  • Context for Aurra Sing in the intro
  • I'm not sure the information about her wielding 2 lightsabers and her fighting style is necessary to be mentioned in the intro Lewisr (talk) 17:56, 27 August 2023 (UTC)
spookly
  • Per precedent, death location and date should be worked into a note so as to only use one ref for the field.
  • I think the very first bio paragraph (which is currently without a subsection) could be put under the second subsection to solve that, and since it's also not optimal to have 1-paragraph subsections in general unless it's legacy related. I also don't think the Anakin quote is very relevant to her specifically, so not much lost.—spookywillowwtalk 16:39, 30 August 2023 (UTC)
Panther
  • In the first sentence of the second section, could you use something more specific than "the event" to describe what happened even if its just "the attack" or "Saato's attack" just for clarity/specificity especially since it's a new section?
  • "Upon saving the farmer, he was directed to Jabba's Palace; however, when he arrived, he was greeted by Sing who..." If possible, can you avoid the instances of passive voice here? And if it's the case, maybe make it more clear that Bellek was directing him to Saato?
  • How do you feel about pipelinking Telekinesis to just "telekinetically" instead of "telekinetically gripped and strangled" as a whole? Panther436 (talk) 05:36, 10 September 2023 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 19:17, 20 September 2023 (UTC)