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Riggs Ashar

  • Nominated by: Exiled Jedi Oldrepublic crest (Greetings) 18:01, October 6, 2012 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: He's not a nice man...

(3 ACs/3 Users/6 Total)

Support

  1. I guess I'm really easy to please. Winterz (talk) 20:54, October 7, 2012 (UTC)
  2. ACvote Cavalier OneFarStar(Squadron channel) 18:02, October 15, 2012 (UTC)
  3. Commander Code-8 To say hi, press 42 21:15, November 8, 2012 (UTC)
  4. ACvote IFYLOFD (Floyd's crib) 21:35, November 29, 2012 (UTC)
  5. NaruHina Talk Anakinsolo 03:37, December 13, 2012 (UTC)
  6. Inqvote Menkooroo (talk) 04:06, December 13, 2012 (UTC)

Object

  1. Winterz
    • With such huge P&T section, you should extend the Biography.
      • I trimmed some redundant information from the P&T and added another sentence to the biography.--Exiled Jedi Oldrepublic crest (Greetings) 20:46, October 7, 2012 (UTC)
    • Some context on the Militia and mentioning his mechanical duties should do it.Winterz (talk) 19:57, October 7, 2012 (UTC)
      • It doesn't actually say that he had any mechanical duties, it just said in the statistics that he had repair skills.--Exiled Jedi Oldrepublic crest (Greetings) 20:46, October 7, 2012 (UTC)
Cav
  • prevented him from receiving the assignments he had hoped to receive upon joining. - repetition of receiving/receive. Can you vary it a little? - Cavalier OneFarStar(Squadron channel) 14:11, October 9, 2012 (UTC)
Reminds me of Restharven
  • "As a youth, Ashar was tough and strong, a fact that he used to gain power over his fellows, who were reluctant to fight back due to his strength." Run-on sentence.
  • "a fact which did not upset many people who knew him." Should joining the militia upset them? Do you mean they weren't surprised?
    • Ultimate Adversaries states: "No one was sorry to see him join the militia..." Any suggestions for how to word the article to better represent this?--Exiled Jedi Oldrepublic crest (Greetings) 16:57, December 12, 2012 (UTC)
      • I made it stated a bit more flatly, since it does say "no-one," but you were right about how to handle it. NaruHina Talk Anakinsolo 03:36, December 13, 2012 (UTC)
  • "His goals were to gain wealth and fame," wouldn't a goal be relevant to his biography?
  • You say "lack of intelligence" every time it comes up.
  • His hair looks yellow to me. Is it stated as brown in the source? NaruHina Talk Anakinsolo 04:19, December 11, 2012 (UTC)
    • It's called light brown in the source. I would have picked another color to describe his hair as well.--Exiled Jedi Oldrepublic crest (Greetings) 16:57, December 12, 2012 (UTC)
A stupid, nitpicky, hyper-inclusive one
  • If the source notes that there are specifically two people who follow him around --- "Unidentified blah blah blah" articles for both of them? Menkooroo (talk) 04:01, December 13, 2012 (UTC)
    • It just says that he had a "couple of hangers-on". If you think this means he had exactly two, then I will create articles for them.--Exiled Jedi Oldrepublic crest (Greetings) 04:03, December 13, 2012 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 21:47, December 14, 2012 (UTC)