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Retention

  • Nominated by: Tommy-Macaroni (he/they) 09:39, 8 September 2024 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: Been meaning to do this since I got Rise and Fall, glad I've finally had time. Also accidental collaboration with Derra system.
  • Date Archived: 23:42, 8 October 2024 (UTC)
  • Final word count: 596 words (133 introduction, 439 body, 24 behind the scenes)
  • Word count at nomination time: 583 words (129 introduction, 430 body, 24 behind the scenes)
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Support

  1. ACvote Lewisr (talk) 02:26, 17 September 2024 (UTC)
  2. ACvote —spookywillowwtalk 20:10, 17 September 2024 (UTC)
  3. ACvote Wok142 (talk) 18:29, 25 September 2024 (UTC)
  4. ACvote Master FredceriqueCommerce Guild(talk) (he/him) 23:40, 8 October 2024 (UTC)

Object

Lew
  • Derra IV and Lothal could use context Lewisr (talk) 22:16, 16 September 2024 (UTC)
    • I intentionally didn't add this for both initially as a) I think it's redundant to add "astronomical object" as supposed context and b) the whole Lothal schtick is context anyway, but added for both since you asked. Tommy-Macaroni (he/they) 22:30, 16 September 2024 (UTC)
Wok
  • Should the intro say "greatest Imperial successes of the war" ?
    • Yes, done.
  • In the Description section, I think gravity wells should be mentioned as how they pull the ships from hyperspace.
    • Added, though still in the context of interdictors in general.
  • I believe this is a case where linking to time is not the most appropriate, per a conversation on discord from a while ago. Essentially, the current Time article is really about definition 1 (here: https://www.merriam-webster.com/dictionary/time) as opposed to definition 2
    • That makes sense, removed.
  • In Disrupting supplies, shouldn't this part "To accomplish this, Sloane and the Retention's 7th Fleet" just say Sloane and the 7th Fleet? I don't get the impression that the Retention was the lead ship or anything.
    • I believed I actually added that so the Retention was named in all paragraphs. I remember that in the past some reviewers got annoyed if that wasn't the case, but I agree it reads better without. Removed.
  • I think Derra IV probably needs the astronomical object context in the intro
    • Done.
  • So does the ship get reincorporated from exile or no? The intro says "the Imperial forces involved were folded back into mainstream Imperial operations" but the body only says that it resulted in "[Sloane] and the other Imperial leaders being reincorporated into mainline Imperial operations." If the Retention specifically was reincorporated, it should definitely be mentioned in the body. If the source only makes note of the personnel being reincorporated, I would suggest you adjust the intro to say personnel or something instead of forces so it doesn't read as the Retention being reincorporated.
    • It was the leadership; updated in intro.
  • Would you want to add in an image of the Seventh Fleet logo into the Exile section? Wok142 (talk) 19:36, 24 September 2024 (UTC)
    • Nice idea, added.
  • Note: Thanks for the review, just to let you know I reverted your copy edit, as adverbs are not hyphenated unlike regular compound adjectives (see here and here). Tommy-Macaroni (he/they) 09:03, 25 September 2024 (UTC)
    • Ah, my mistake, good catch. Wok142 (talk) 18:29, 25 September 2024 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 23:40, 8 October 2024 (UTC)