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Republic Law 44-12

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Support

  1. Commander Code-8 To say hi, press 42 05:54, November 13, 2012 (UTC)
  2. Exiled Jedi Oldrepublic crest (Greetings) 23:22, December 29, 2012 (UTC)
  3. ACvote IFYLOFD (Floyd's crib) 04:27, December 30, 2012 (UTC)
  4. ACvote Cavalier OneFarStar(Squadron channel) 09:41, January 9, 2013 (UTC)
  5. ACvote 1358 (Talk) 19:01, January 11, 2013 (UTC)

Object

The barns on fire!
  • Only done a quick look through for now. You've got a quote from Phantom Menace which should be used as an Inderect mention part in the appearances. Make sure that you put the Ep 1 part in the Bts and find out if any other PM stuff. (e.g. The comic, novel etc.) mentions the slavery ban.
    • Just a clarification. This law banned slave collars, not slavery. So Phantom Menace would not be listed because we don't know if she was referring to this law or the laws actually banning slavery. I used the quote to underline the point that slavery was thought to be extinct when it wasn't, even some 3,000 years after when this law was in effect.
      • Good point, never mind then.
  • Bring up that the mission this appears in is Republic side in the Bts
    • Done.
  • The Bts says the law was mentioned in SWTOR, but the appearances section says that it appeared in the game. I'm personally not sure which one you should change to match up with the other one, but make sure you do it. Commander Code-8 To say hi, press 42 09:58, November 5, 2012 (UTC)
Exiled Jedi
  • The first paragraph of the intro seems a little choppy. Could you reword it to improve flow?
    • Done.
  • I think the slave collar chips should have an article.
    • Done.
  • "...specific incident involved Senator Doli-bur Barc who imported chips for the slave collars." Could you mention where this incident occured in the intro?--Exiled Jedi Oldrepublic crest (Greetings) 02:54, December 16, 2012 (UTC)
  • In the intro you do not mention that the collars are Rylothian slave collars. Technically, we don't know if the law outlawed all slave collars, so you should make the type of collar clear in the introduction.
    • Done.
  • Could you mention that the law specifically banned Rylothian slave collars in the Background section.
    • Done.
  • "Before the Republic's existence, the Rakata Infinite Empire controlled the galaxy placing all other species under its rule." Does it actually say that the Infinite Empire placed all species under their control? I was under the impression that they only controlled some of the galaxy.
    • A majority of the known galaxy that was to be the Republic, corrected.
  • "Throughout this, slave collars were in constant use." I can't understand what you meant to say with this sentence. Could you reword it?
    • Done.
  • "There, the individual recovered the chips and later turned them over to Denal-zon, who proceeded to destroy them." Does Denal-zon actually destroy them? Please correct me if I'm wrong, but I thought he only said that he would destroy them.
    • No he doesn't show us actually destroying them but he says he will.
  • Is it spelled "Rylothean" or "Rylothian" in the game? You have it spelled differently in the quote than in the body.--Exiled Jedi Oldrepublic crest (Greetings) 16:06, December 17, 2012 (UTC)
Cav
  • In the BTS, an quick explanation is needed as to why the light side choice is considered to be correct. - Cavalier OneFarStar(Squadron channel) 14:32, January 3, 2013 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 19:01, January 11, 2013 (UTC)