Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Reinforced Insulated Sheath armor

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Reinforced Insulated Sheath armor

  • Nominated by: OLIOSTER (talk) 21:33, November 16, 2010 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: None

(4 ACs/1 Users/5 Total)

Support

  1. Jinzler 13:57, November 22, 2010 (UTC)
  2. ACvote Cavalier OneFarStar(Squadron channel) 01:10, December 3, 2010 (UTC)
  3. ACvote Toprawa and Ralltiir 00:58, December 21, 2010 (UTC)
  4. Inqvote --Eyrezer 01:27, December 22, 2010 (UTC)
  5. ACvote 1358 (Talk) 23:33, December 22, 2010 (UTC)

Object

Cav
  • Do we have an article for armorsmith? If not, one should be created and linked to. - Cavalier OneFarStar(Squadron channel) 09:26, November 17, 2010 (UTC)
    • Created a stub and linked it in the article (and Mol Ni'mai's article as well). OLIOSTER (talk) 15:50, November 17, 2010 (UTC)
Jinzler
  • Shouldn't it be "R.I.S.", rather than "R.I.S" as you refer to it in the article?
  • According to the Russ Grimblade article, that character wore RIS armor. It might be worth checking to see if there are any other NPCs who have RIS armor as well.
    • This article is about the armor, not who wore it, and I don't think mentioning the potentially ton of random NPCs in the game that are wearing a piece of this armor is worth mentioning. OLIOSTER (talk) 23:12, November 21, 2010 (UTC)
      • I see you point, if there are lots of NPCs with the armor then it would be unnecessary to mention the name of every single one. However, I would prefer it if you mention some of them, just to show the scope of the armor's usage, to make clear that the player character isn't the only person to use RIS armor. --Jinzler 11:32, November 22, 2010 (UTC)
        • I'll mention the character you linked and see if I can come up with some other users. OLIOSTER (talk) 12:29, November 22, 2010 (UTC)
          • I've added several more mentions of the armor's use in the History section. Is this sufficient? OLIOSTER (talk) 13:45, November 22, 2010 (UTC)
            • Yes, I believe that should be fine. --Jinzler 13:57, November 22, 2010 (UTC)
  • SWG wiki mentions that RIS armor can be obtained from a terminal on the Test Center server, you may want to consider mentioning this.
  • Jinzler 20:10, November 21, 2010 (UTC)
  • The updates archive on the official SWG site doesn't currently mention when RIS armor was introduced to the game, but if you check out this archived version, it reveals that the RIS armor quest was added to the game on the 13th November 2003, not in 2004 like the article currently states. --Jinzler 11:55, November 22, 2010 (UTC)
    • Addressed. I honestly don't remember where 2004 came from. OLIOSTER (talk) 12:29, November 22, 2010 (UTC)
Xd1358
  • Preliminary objection: Any reason why all instances of Reinforced Insulated Sheath armor and R.I.S armor aren't preceded by a "the"? It seems that there should be "the" before them. 1358 (Talk) 17:33, December 2, 2010 (UTC)
    • Added a "the" to the subsections, but not the intro. Just think it reads better without one. OLIOSTER (talk) 19:23, December 2, 2010 (UTC)
  • The first sentence of the second paragraph in the description section is identical to the description sentence in the intro. Can you vary a bit? 1358 (Talk) 16:59, December 22, 2010 (UTC)
    • Tried to vary it a bit in the intro. Is that good? OLIOSTER (talk) 23:22, December 22, 2010 (UTC)
      • Looking good. 1358 (Talk) 23:33, December 22, 2010 (UTC)
Toprawa
  • Is there a reason why the History section keeps referring to the spacer as "them"? Is there not only one spacer involved here?
    • The player can be either male or female, so I went with the gender-neutral them or they to refer to the player. OLIOSTER (talk) 09:20, December 17, 2010 (UTC)
  • The final two sentences of the BTS read a bit awkwardly. Specifically: "and if a character has already learned it, it just produces a normal R.I.S. armor segment." What are both instances of "it" referring to? The reference is lost on me as a reader. Please clarify. Also, "R.I.S. armor can be acquired for free on the game's test center." Should this/could this not be "in" or "at" the game's test center? I'm unfamiliar with this element of the game, but the use of "on" just sounds strange.
    • Hopefully clarified. OLIOSTER (talk) 09:20, December 17, 2010 (UTC)
    • Reviewing note: I've changed all instances of the Bothan creator's name to his last name as a formality. if there's a reason why his first name should be used, let me know. Toprawa and Ralltiir 22:29, December 16, 2010 (UTC)
Eyrezer

Your description section currently only describes the materials, but the actual design. Can you add another paragraph to the first section in which you describe what can be seen of the armor from the infobox image? --Eyrezer 10:17, December 21, 2010 (UTC)

  • Hows that? OLIOSTER (talk) 00:56, December 22, 2010 (UTC)
    • That'll do nicely. --Eyrezer 01:27, December 22, 2010 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 23:33, December 22, 2010 (UTC)


  • I used Shadowsuit as a bit of a template on how to section up this article. OLIOSTER (talk) 21:33, November 16, 2010 (UTC)