Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Reef Fortress

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Reef Fortress

• Nominated by: - Princess GLG 14:22, May 3, 2013 (UTC)
• Nomination comments: WP:NOVELS

(3 ACs/3 Users/6 Total)

Support

1. Good work. 501st dogma^(talk) 22:33, May 5, 2013 (UTC)
2. Supreme Emperor (talk) 02:53, May 7, 2013 (UTC)
3. Pre-nom reviewed. —MJ— ^Holocomm 02:58, May 9, 2013 (UTC)
4. IFYLOFD ^{(Enter the Floydome)} 00:13, May 18, 2013 (UTC)
5. Good work JangFett ^(Talk) 13:23, May 22, 2013 (UTC)
6. Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 06:39, May 23, 2013 (UTC)

Object

Jangeth

• Check your infobox's formatting. The double bracket doesn't need to be on a separate line. JangFett ^(Talk) 15:37, May 3, 2013 (UTC)
  • Fixed. - Princess GLG 15:55, May 3, 2013 (UTC)
    • I'll continue my review sometime later. :P JangFett ^(Talk) 16:04, May 3, 2013 (UTC)

501st

• In the intro, you should mention that it is on Hapes. The description section needs this mentioned as well.
  • Added.
    • I still think you should say it was on Hapes outright, rather than just the Hapan ocean.
      • Fixed.
        • Could you give context on Hapes? Just say its a planet.
          • Added.
• History: Who are Lowbacca, Jacen, and Jaina? Where is the Fountain Palace? Be sure to contextify. (I know you give context to the Jedi later, but do it up front)
  • Better?
• You want the history to be in chronological order, so the part about here staying there as kid should be moved to the top of the section.
  • Moved.
    • The moved left this behind. "Ambassador Yfra and some Hapan Honor Guards to watch over them." Not quite connected at all.
      • Should have seen that, fixed.
• I think the history section should focus a bit more on the Reef Fortress. You could probally cut a bit of the chase scene out.
  • Better?
• Article for the assassin attack?
  • Will do later.
    • You can link to it at least, even though it will be a redlink for now.
      • Done.
        • Since the redlink is also present in the intro, you will have to create an article for it.
          • Done. - Princess GLG 23:27, May 3, 2013 (UTC)
• You could probably describe the appearance of the fort from the image in the infobox.
  • What exactly can I describe? The only things about the appearance that I could put into the infobox are the height and width which I can't get from the image.
    • You could describe the high walls and the turret things.
      • Done.
• Good work. 501st dogma^(talk) 17:40, May 3, 2013 (UTC)
  • Thanks. - Princess GLG 18:46, May 3, 2013 (UTC)
• Be careful when you answer objections. I found quite a few repeated words, and some grammatical errors that were not there before. Make sure to look over the article in preview mode. 501st dogma^(talk) 20:27, May 3, 2013 (UTC)
  • Sorry, I was kinda in a hurry, but I should have gone over it again. I'll try to be more careful next time. - Princess GLG 20:57, May 3, 2013 (UTC)
    • That's okay. 501st dogma^(talk) 21:34, May 3, 2013 (UTC)
• I'll continue my review tomorrow. 501st dogma^(talk) 23:57, May 3, 2013 (UTC)
• You might want to mention the lack of secret passages.
  • Added.
• Article for the Ambassador?
  • The ambassador is Yfra. I tried to change the wording to make this more obvious.
    • Sorry, I mean the Mairan one. 501st dogma^(talk) 20:28, May 4, 2013 (UTC)
      • Ah, added. - Princess GLG 01:32, May 5, 2013 (UTC)
• I don't think it's necessary to say they were bored. You might want to cut that bit out.
  • Removed.
• You should mention in the Description section that the fort was powered and had a deflector shield generator. 501st dogma^(talk) 11:19, May 4, 2013 (UTC)
  • Added. - Princess GLG 19:30, May 4, 2013 (UTC)
• I would mention in addition to the fact that there were no passages, that it was built to be impregnable.
  • Added.
• You might want to mention that Chume went to the fort earlier in the history.
  • She only arrived after the first incident with the carnivorous seaweed which is when it says she arrived.
    • Ah, missed that.
• "Isolder won the duel after the referee called a sudden death round." You should mention that he won in the sudden death round. Right now it sounds kind of like Isolder won because a sudden death round was called.
  • Done.
• A release date for Jedi Eclipse would be nice. That should be all. 501st dogma^(talk) 16:01, May 5, 2013 (UTC)
  • Added.- Princess GLG 20:07, May 5, 2013 (UTC)

SE

• In the paragraph about the attack by the Bartokk assassins, can you make sure you have all the information about the chase? I recall Ta'a Chume shooting out their repulsor prior to the Bartokk's being killed by the seaweed. Supreme Emperor (talk) 13:01, May 5, 2013 (UTC)
  • Its an article about the fort, so all the info about the chase doesn't need to be presented as it doesn't quite pertain to the fort itself. 501st dogma^(talk) 14:19, May 5, 2013 (UTC)

Floyd

• Would like a touch more context on Ambassador Yfra. Who did she serve?
  • Added.
• Try and shore up your linking, I'm seeing some glaring omissions.
  • I must be blind, but I'm not really seeing any. Could you give a couple examples of what I'm missing?
    • Stuff like turrets, assassin (which you linked, but wasn't before). It's always best to double-check. IFYLOFD ^{(Enter the Floydome)} 23:54, May 17, 2013 (UTC)
      • I've gone over it again and fixed a few things. - Princess GLG 00:11, May 18, 2013 (UTC)
• It should be mentioned in the body that Tenel Ka was also a Jedi trainee. IFYLOFD ^{(Enter the Floydome)} 04:38, May 17, 2013 (UTC)
  • Added. - Princess GLG 13:20, May 17, 2013 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 06:39, May 23, 2013 (UTC)