Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Raspar system/Legends

Nominated by: Stake black msg 19:39, March 15, 2013 (UTC)
Nomination comments: The style is a bit unorthodox. WP:AST all the way.

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Raspar system

MasterFred^(Whatever) 19:13, March 24, 2013 (UTC)
Assuming Tope's objection is satisfied. Winterz (talk) 20:55, March 24, 2013 (UTC)
Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 21:07, March 24, 2013 (UTC)
IFYLOFD ^{(Floyd's crib)} 00:40, March 25, 2013 (UTC)
Supreme Emperor (talk) 01:35, March 25, 2013 (UTC)

~~Definitely expand the intro. You can pretty much always bet that an intro only one to two lines long should be expanded.~~
- The trick is, do I add the non-canon info with the canon info in the introduction? I preferred to leave it out because I didn't know how to proceed.
  - Okay. See what I did there. Stake black ^msg 17:45, March 18, 2013 (UTC)
    - I've split it into two simple sentences simply to prevent it being only one sentence.
~~The last sentence in the "History" section is very unclear. You should reword this and pay closer attention to grammar to make this readable. MasterFred^(Whatever) 04:54, March 16, 2013 (UTC)~~
- It's odd, but it's almost verbatim what is on the source. See this and this for examples of status articles using the same sentence. Stake black ^msg 15:42, March 16, 2013 (UTC)
  - I've worded it to make more sense and flow better. MasterFred^(Whatever) 19:13, March 24, 2013 (UTC)

~~If the Raspar system is located in the Nijune sector, according to the Atlas, why isn't this included in the body of the article?~~ Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 19:52, March 24, 2013 (UTC)
- It's not, I've rectified it. Thanks for spotting. Stake black ^msg 21:03, March 24, 2013 (UTC)

Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 07:02, March 25, 2013 (UTC)