Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Rancor

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The following discussion is preserved as an archive of a good article nomination that was unsuccessful. Please do not modify it.

Rancor

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Support

  1. Dark Ridley 02:57, 3 July 2008 (UTC)

Object

  1. Not sourced, could probably be expanded a fair bit. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 07:38, 3 July 2008 (UTC)
  2. Xadún's Dun Möch
    • GA tag required.
    • Expand the intro. There's much you could use and still be brief, like their use as mounts, gladiatorial combatants etc.
    • Biology and Appearence section is rather fragmented. join some of the sentences up to improve the flow.
    • Only the Witches of Dathomir used Rancors as mounts. The Human populice were Zsinj's pinal colony, who used speeders. Edit thise references please, particularly with regards to the "Human" population. Focus on the Clan's use, and don't generalise to Humans use.
    • I recommend a seperate section for the Subspecies of Rancor, outlining the point that despite Dathomir is cited as the planet of origin, how rancors appeared and evolved according to their environments across the galaxy is largely a mystery, and briefly describing each type and it's origins.
    • Remove the lists. They aren't necessary since a) you refer to all owners earlier in the "Wider Galaxy" section, b) it's probable they existed on other planets as well so a few examples will suffice, c) having a subspecies secion will encompass these anyway and d) all individual rancors should have been mentioned in the article body anyway.
    • Are the pictures of Dathomir and Ottethan neccessary? They seem to have little purpose, at least where they are presently placed.
    • Like Ackbar says, sourcing too, and it seems this entire article could be expanded.
    • That's the first lot. Cover them, and I'll be back. With a lot of graft, I don't doubt this could be fashioned into an FA, but it will take a lot of work from where it is now, Ridley. Although Rancor's aren't my specialty, if you want some help, drop me a line. Darth Xadún(Consult the Holocron) 20:58, 4 July 2008 (UTC)

Comments

  1. This is my first suggestion, and from what I know so far the article seems very good, and unless some massive new source of Rancor related knowledge is created, I doubt there will be any major changes. Dark Ridley 02:57, 3 July 2008 (UTC)
  1. Made some changes to the article, anything I should take care of that are major problems? Dark Ridley 17:42, 24 July 2008 (UTC)