Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Raido

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Raido

(5 ACs/2 Users/7 Total)

Support

  1. Exiled Jedi Oldrepublic crest (Greetings) 03:42, January 18, 2014 (UTC)
  2. ACvote Winterz (talk) 12:37, January 24, 2014 (UTC)
  3. Ayrehead02 (talk) 21:19, February 10, 2014 (UTC)
  4. ACvote IFYLOFD (Enter the Floydome) 06:10, March 1, 2014 (UTC)
  5. ACvote Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 16:51, March 4, 2014 (UTC)
  6. Inqvote Good job. JangFett (Talk) 23:21, March 6, 2014 (UTC)
  7. ACvote Sir Cavalier of OneFarStar(Squadron channel) 21:28, March 16, 2014 (UTC)

Object

Exiled Jedi
  • Does Crash Course mention that the Clone Wars started in 22 BBY? If not, you will need to source this to something else.
    • Done
  • You should use Template:Cite web for the "Book of Sith endnotes" citation.--Exiled Jedi Oldrepublic crest (Greetings) 02:31, January 11, 2014 (UTC)
    • Also done, though I couldn't find anything about Raido in the link. Interestingly, it seems the link has actually changed, so I'll probably need to pull through the Wayback Machine too see an older version of the site and possibly use a WBM link if I find an earlier version of the page mentioning Raido. --Clonehunter(Report your W.M.D.) 05:26, January 11, 2014 (UTC)
      • Okay, figured it out. The link was redirecting somehow, but it shouldn't anymore.
Winterz
  • Context on the Clone Wars in the body.
    • How does that look?
  • I believe the commentator should be linked somewhere in the body. Find a way, sir.
  • Looking really good, well done. Winterz (talk) 20:32, January 16, 2014 (UTC)
Ayrehead
  • Just one small thing, could you mention the doom pipes somewhere in the body, or at least link them in the quote. Ayrehead02 (talk) 12:24, February 10, 2014 (UTC)
    • There. I don't know about that dash placement, but for a personal aesthetic preference I thought it best to keep out of quote.--Clonehunter(Report your W.M.D.) 18:54, February 10, 2014 (UTC)
El Jefe
  • Intro quote unsourced.
    • Fixed
  • Is it appropriate to just call it a "Pod"? You use "Podracer" for most of the article.
    • I believe Pod is in in-universe Slang (See my note under Dud Bolt), but even so I don't know if it would be considered "proper." --Clonehunter(Report your W.M.D.) 17:24, February 27, 2014 (UTC)
  • In the intro you say the Mon Gazza Maze is a course, but the bio says that it's an event.
    • Fixed for consistency, however, I'd say it's similar to the Daytona 500 being both the name of a racetrack, and people referring to the major race there (That just happened Sunday) as the Daytona 500. --Clonehunter(Report your W.M.D.) 20:02, February 24, 2014 (UTC)
  • Eye color is infobox-exclusive: and can you really say they're white? He seems to have a dark pupil. IFYLOFD (Enter the Floydome) 03:00, February 22, 2014 (UTC)
Cav
  • Did Tano eventually apprehend Maxus? - Sir Cavalier of OneFarStar(Squadron channel) 08:54, February 27, 2014 (UTC)
    • At the end of the comic Asajj Ventress and Tano duel on-top of his Podracer (Somehow) and one of his engiens end up getting severed by Tano. He crashes, but it isn't clear if he's killed or not. Kareen makes a vague mention of Maxus 'retiring.' Do you think his fate should be included under Raido's bio? --Clonehunter(Report your W.M.D.) 17:24, February 27, 2014 (UTC)
      • A little mention is needed, as a lot of Raido's actions are against Tano, and Tano is there because of Maxus. - Sir Cavalier of OneFarStar(Squadron channel) 18:31, March 6, 2014 (UTC)
        • How does that look then? I also puffed the into up and spaced out the paragraphs, thoguh I'm not certain it was needed. The paragraphs in the bio were starting to look a little too beefy to be kept the way they were, imo. --Clonehunter(Report your W.M.D.) 18:56, March 6, 2014 (UTC)
Toprawa
  • I just want to check that Crash Course can indeed be used as a source for Mon Gazza being a Mid Rim planet in the Biography.
    • Fixed
      • Unfortunately, this referencing is still incorrect, because you currently have the phrase "he participated in a Podrace on the Mid Rim" sourced to the Atlas Online Companion. But the AOC does not say he participated in a Podrace. The AOC may only be used to reference literally what information comes from its source, which is the "Mid Rim" mention. Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 16:33, March 4, 2014 (UTC)
        • Whoops, missed that. Consider that part fixed then.
  • I'm confused about the latter half of this sentence: "Raido was also not above accepting bribes to demolish the competition and had been well enough off to accept such a payoff from San Maxus." I'm just not sure what's that trying to say exactly. He was wealthy enough to accept a bribe? That doesn't make sense to me. Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 18:15, March 1, 2014 (UTC)
    • I was trying to say that Raido was willing to throw a race in exchange for whatever Maxus was giving him. Yah, I might try to reword that... --Clonehunter(Report your W.M.D.) 19:31, March 1, 2014 (UTC)
      • Yes, I request doing so. Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 19:37, March 1, 2014 (UTC)
        • Alright, though I changed it from the idea of throwing a race (Though he must of knew the danger), because for all we know he didn't plan to demolish his Podracer and be unable to participate in the main event. FOr all we know, he just wanted to wreck Ashoka without doing himself in. --Clonehunter(Report your W.M.D.) 15:33, March 4, 2014 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 21:28, March 16, 2014 (UTC)


Should I create an Equipment Section? --Clonehunter(Report your W.M.D.) 19:15, March 6, 2014 (UTC)