Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Raid on Yirt-4138-Grek-12

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Raid on Yirt-4138-Grek-12

• Nominated by: Kreivi Wolter 17:23, February 20, 2011 (UTC)
• Nomination comments: Argente gone badass.

(3 ACs/2 Users/5 Total)

Support

1. Clone Commander Lee ^Talk 16:00, February 22, 2011 (UTC)
2. Kreivi's movin' on up. Toprawa and Ralltiir 19:00, February 25, 2011 (UTC)
3. Master Jonathan (Council Chambers) Thursday, March 3, 2011, 22:38 UTC
4. Looks good. 1358 ^(Talk) 23:02, March 4, 2011 (UTC)
5. Cavalier One^{(Squadron channel)} 19:58, March 7, 2011 (UTC)

Object

Toprawa

• I'm thinking it would be worth leaving an article for the slicer's facility: Mentioned in the infobox, here in the intro "a remote base located on the asteroid," and here in the main "a secret industrial espionage training center"
  • This again... done. Kreivi Wolter 10:09, February 25, 2011 (UTC)
• What is a "vessel drive"? Deserving of an article? "came out with a cranium-implanted vessel drive" Toprawa and Ralltiir 03:19, February 25, 2011 (UTC)
  • Done. Kreivi Wolter 10:09, February 25, 2011 (UTC)

From the weird named asteroid X1358D

• "In 22 BBY, during the Separatist Crisis, a raid took place on an asteroid named Yirt-4138-Grek-12 between the Corporate Alliance and a group of slicers." You really can't say a raid took place between two factions; a raid is usually performed or conducted by someone. "...a raid on an asteroid named Yirt-4138-Grek-12 was conducted by the CA." or something like that would be better.
  • I took the liberty to copy that sentence of yours to the article. Kreivi Wolter 18:56, March 3, 2011 (UTC)
• "When the Alliance learned that a remote slicer compound located on the asteroid was used to supply industrial espionage agents who where stealing data from the corporation, it responded with deadly force." This intro sentence is too detailed, and the transition to the next sentence is choppy. My suggestion is something like "Upon learning of a secret compound on the asteroid used to supply espionage agents stealing data from the Alliance, the corporation deployed its NR-N99 Persuader-class droid enforcers which then attacked the base."
  • Copycatted again. Kreivi Wolter 18:56, March 3, 2011 (UTC)
• Is there, or should there be an article on the slicer group? It looks like some kind of organized group.
  • Articles, articles, so many articles. I get on that right away. Kreivi Wolter 18:56, March 3, 2011 (UTC)
    • Done. Kreivi Wolter 21:46, March 3, 2011 (UTC)
• Not making this an objection, but I'd prefer if [[Slicer compound]] was moved to another title. It seems a bit unspecific—it could be an article on a slicer compound in general—perhaps put the name of the asteroid in front there?
  • It is an official nickname. Kreivi Wolter 18:56, March 3, 2011 (UTC)
    • Will elaborate tomorrow. 1358 ^(Talk) 21:10, March 3, 2011 (UTC)
      • Right. Kreivi Wolter 21:46, March 3, 2011 (UTC)
        • I've conferred with two other ACs and we agreed that Yirt-4138-Grek-12 slicer compound would be a better title, so I've moved the article. 1358 ^(Talk) 23:02, March 4, 2011 (UTC)
• Rather nitpicky, but you probably need to source the year as it isn't mentioned anywhere in the HoloNet broadcast.
  • How so? Kreivi Wolter 19:07, March 3, 2011 (UTC)
    • Just because two FAs are improperly sourced doesn't mean this should be. I will put those two articles up for Inq review at the next meeting. 1358 ^(Talk) 21:10, March 3, 2011 (UTC)
      • Right. Gonna get on that tomorrow. Kreivi Wolter 21:46, March 3, 2011 (UTC)
        • Okay, it's done. And btw, there's this too with no time sourcing, and I believe there are many others among the FAs and GAs. Could you brought this sourcing issue up at that meeting of yours? Kreivi Wolter 17:25, March 4, 2011 (UTC)
• And that's all. Nice article. You should write Yirt-4138-Grek-12 too! 1358 ^(Talk) 20:45, March 2, 2011 (UTC)
  • Outo asteroidi nimeltä x1358d... heh heh. Kreivi Wolter 18:56, March 3, 2011 (UTC)

Cav

• Intro: Upon learning of a secret slicer compound on the asteroid used to supply espionage agents stealing data from the Alliance, - Is this correct? The compound was supplying the agents that stole the data, or is it a mistake and should it be that they were supplying stolen data to the agents? Based on the main article, its the former, but I think the intro needs to be clarified a little.
  • Yup. Kreivi Wolter 14:34, March 4, 2011 (UTC)
• "Alliance expeditors" - can we have an article for this? - Cavalier One^{(Squadron channel)} 09:27, March 4, 2011 (UTC)
  • That depends. Maybe someone will make one. Kreivi Wolter 14:34, March 4, 2011 (UTC)

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