- The following discussion is preserved as an archive of a good article nomination that was successful. Please do not modify it.
Raid at the Wretch of Tayron
- Nominated by: Brandon Rhea(talk) 16:49, October 23, 2015 (UTC)
- Nomination comments:
(3 ACs/5 Users/8 Total)
Support
- Ayrehead02 (talk) 03:11, October 31, 2015 (UTC)
- Cwedin(talk) 06:24, October 31, 2015 (UTC)
- Nivlacanator(talk) 00:29, November 4, 2015 (UTC)
- I'm a big fan of Shattered Empire; kind of wish it was an ongoing series. Trayus(Academy) 00:58, January 9, 2016 (UTC)
- <-Omicron(Leave a message at the BEEP!) 04:06, January 24, 2016 (UTC)
Supreme Emperor (talk) 01:02, February 13, 2016 (UTC)
Sir Cavalier of One
(Squadron channel) 19:05, February 14, 2016 (UTC)- 1358 (Talk) 18:02, April 8, 2016 (UTC)
Object
Does the first line of the first quote not need a question mark? Or is that how it's written in the comic?Ayrehead02 (talk) 02:53, October 31, 2015 (UTC)- Good catch. Fixed. - Brandon Rhea(talk) 03:06, October 31, 2015 (UTC)
Cav
Similar to Assault on an Imperial outpost above, the infobox is suffering from stretched fields and strange bullet misalignments.- Sir Cavalier of One
(Squadron channel) 00:08, January 9, 2016 (UTC)
- You'll have to talk to Cade about that. It was part of the updates he and CzechOut worked on for portability conversion. It's not something I can rectify as part of a nomination process. - Brandon Rhea(talk) 00:15, January 9, 2016 (UTC)
- Quick note that the above objection can be resolved because Cade fixed the infoboxes. - Brandon Rhea(talk) 20:47, February 13, 2016 (UTC)
- You'll have to talk to Cade about that. It was part of the updates he and CzechOut worked on for portability conversion. It's not something I can rectify as part of a nomination process. - Brandon Rhea(talk) 00:15, January 9, 2016 (UTC)
Trayus
In Before the Awakening, Poe recalls his father telling him stories about a raid on an ISB base in the Outer Rim with General Solo wherein he and his squadmates took out an AT-ST that crashed into the wall and allowed them easy entrance (pg. 134). I think the context makes it pretty clear this is the referenced instance.Darth Trayus(Trayus Academy) 00:23, January 9, 2016 (UTC)- Good catch. I've added it to the appearances. - Brandon Rhea(talk) 00:24, January 9, 2016 (UTC)
- Do you think the info about the downed AT-ST being the exact cause of the breach is worth specifying? From the book: "...no one had known how to get inside until, completely by accident, they had taken down an AT-ST that then crashed into the base and allowed them easy access." Trayus(Academy) 00:32, January 9, 2016 (UTC)
- Yeah, good call. I've added that. - Brandon Rhea(talk) 00:43, January 9, 2016 (UTC)
- Do you think the info about the downed AT-ST being the exact cause of the breach is worth specifying? From the book: "...no one had known how to get inside until, completely by accident, they had taken down an AT-ST that then crashed into the base and allowed them easy access." Trayus(Academy) 00:32, January 9, 2016 (UTC)
- Good catch. I've added it to the appearances. - Brandon Rhea(talk) 00:24, January 9, 2016 (UTC)
Ecks Dee
Check your image caption punctuation. Present tense can also be a complete sentence requiring punctuation.- Can you specifically point out which image captions, if it's not just all of them, that should have punctuation at the end? The Layout Guide rules regarding this aren't 100% clear to me. - Brandon Rhea(talk) 20:47, February 13, 2016 (UTC)
- If the caption is a full sentence it needs a period, and both of the captions in this article are full sentences (subject verbs (present)/verbed (past) object). "Dameron and Sakas assault the base" contains a subject (Dameron and Sakas), a verb (assault), and an object (the base), therefore it's a full sentence. An example of an incomplete sentence would be "Dameron and Sakas in the base", as that lacks a verb. 1358 (Talk) 14:14, February 14, 2016 (UTC)
- Done. - Brandon Rhea(talk) 22:07, February 14, 2016 (UTC)
- If the caption is a full sentence it needs a period, and both of the captions in this article are full sentences (subject verbs (present)/verbed (past) object). "Dameron and Sakas assault the base" contains a subject (Dameron and Sakas), a verb (assault), and an object (the base), therefore it's a full sentence. An example of an incomplete sentence would be "Dameron and Sakas in the base", as that lacks a verb. 1358 (Talk) 14:14, February 14, 2016 (UTC)
- Can you specifically point out which image captions, if it's not just all of them, that should have punctuation at the end? The Layout Guide rules regarding this aren't 100% clear to me. - Brandon Rhea(talk) 20:47, February 13, 2016 (UTC)
Can you reword the intro a bit to focus more on the raid itself than the aftermath?- Done. - Brandon Rhea(talk) 20:47, February 13, 2016 (UTC)
I'm a bit confused about the [2][7] referencing in the body. What exactly is sourced to Shattered Empire and what to Before the Awakening?- Clarified. - Brandon Rhea(talk) 20:47, February 13, 2016 (UTC)
In The aftermath, you have two consecutive [2] references.1358 (Talk) 20:19, February 13, 2016 (UTC)- Fixed. - Brandon Rhea(talk) 20:47, February 13, 2016 (UTC)
Comments
Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 18:02, April 8, 2016 (UTC)
Cwedin
In Shattered Empire, Part II, Leia mentions the New Republic, and in the opening crawl for Part III, Rebel Aliance and New Republic are used synonymously. You may want to add something about how the Alliance is in a transitional phase, possibly in the prelude section.Cwedin(talk) 23:18, October 30, 2015 (UTC)- The state of the New Republic at this time is ambiguous in the comic, so I don't see how it's relevant to a raid conducted by a Rebel Alliance group. - Brandon Rhea(talk) 03:06, October 31, 2015 (UTC)