Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Ra-Zyrth

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Ra-Zyrth

  • Nominated by: Jinzler 20:35, January 14, 2012 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: A Massassi

(4 ACs/1 Users/5 Total)

Support

  1. Clone Commander Lee Talk 14:37, January 16, 2012 (UTC)
  2. ACvoteBlasted vague sources. Do they not know the word "context?" Sigh....—Cal JediInfinite Empire (Personal Comm Channel) 04:18, January 17, 2012 (UTC)
  3. ACvote Toprawa and Ralltiir 07:38, January 20, 2012 (UTC)
  4. ACvote JangFett (Talk) 17:02, January 29, 2012 (UTC)
  5. Inqvote Menkooroo 19:08, February 15, 2012 (UTC)

Object

Return of the Jedi
  • "The Massassi subsequently went to sleep inside a suspended animation capsule," - This makes it sound like he just crawled in there to take a nap. Did he purposefully get inside to be put into suspended animation, or was he placed in there?
    • I have rephrased this to say "deep sleep," but I'm afraid that there is not much more that I can do, as the source does not clarify the nature of his state of sleep. In addition, the source does not reveal whether or not he purposely went inside the suspended animation capsule. --Jinzler 21:33, January 15, 2012 (UTC)
  • "he was fired onto the planet Coruscant during a Sith attack on the world in 5,000 BBY." - "Fired" sounds like was shot from a cannon and used as a projectile. A better explanation here would be good of what you mean by "fired" and why he was placed on Coruscant.
    • Again, the source is unhelpful here and does give any context other than that which is already reflected in the article. It does not state how the capsules were fired and it does not state what Ra-Zyrth and the other commanders were expected to do on Coruscant. I fully see your point that a better explanation is needed here, but that is not really possible to do. --Jinzler 21:33, January 15, 2012 (UTC)
  • The same for the Body's first mention of that event.
    • Per my above statement, this cannot be achieved. --Jinzler 21:33, January 15, 2012 (UTC)
  • That's all for now. Nice looking article.—Cal JediInfinite Empire (Personal Comm Channel) 03:40, January 15, 2012 (UTC)
    • Thank you for your review! --Jinzler 21:33, January 15, 2012 (UTC)
Lee's charge
  • a soldier for the Sith Empire, a powerful territory located within the Stygian Caldera: While the use of the term "Territory" may be correct here, it is confusing. Please change it to something like faction.
    • Fixed --Jinzler 21:33, January 15, 2012 (UTC)
  • That's all. Clone Commander Lee Talk 10:39, January 15, 2012 (UTC)
    • Cheers, Lee. --Jinzler 21:33, January 15, 2012 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 19:41, February 15, 2012 (UTC)