- The following discussion is preserved as an archive of a good article nomination that was successful. Please do not modify it.
Quanto
- Nominated by:—Tommy
(Nine two eight one) 20:20, 15 February 2009 (UTC)
- Nomination comments:Dedicated to Cylka, who gasped in horror upon realizing that Quanto was visiting the GAN. This ugly little mofo may just revive the TOTJ movement.
(3 ACs/2 Users/5 Total)
Support
¿QUANDO QUANDO QUANDO? Graestan(Talk) 01:30, 18 February 2009 (UTC)- SoresuMakashi(Everything I tell you is a lie) 11:21, 18 February 2009 (UTC)
DC 23:19, 24 February 2009 (UTC)- Grunny (Talk) 03:27, 26 February 2009 (UTC)
Cylka-talk- 03:29, 27 February 2009 (UTC)
Object
- Graestan the Merciless:
Linking needs to be gone over more thoroughly.- Should be good now.
Image captions need to be punctuated according to the terms listed here.- Addressed.
Quote attributions need to be punctuated correctly, also.- Addressed.
Source list needs to be arranged in order of publication date.- Addressed, though I do not know the date for the fact file (our articles for them don't have dates).
Fact Files usually have some new info in them. Has the one listed been checked?- Yes, checked with Cylka. Nothing new.
"of an unidentified species" is OOU. Please identify him more simply.- Addressed.
"in the service … serving as" is somewhat repetitive if not redundant as well.- Addressed.
"Quanto was also—" – This wording is somewhat awkward.- Addressed.
There seems to be a bit too much colloquial language here, "den of ill repute" and "did the deed" standing out among others. Later, I see "made haste." Please tone it down a bit; this is an encyclopedia.- Addressed.
"browsing eavesdropping equipment looking for potential victims whose starships they could plunder" – I'm not entirely sure what you're getting at, here. Please rephrase.- Should be good now.
"Quanto persisted, still trying to negotiate a deal" – This is redundant, and it's not necessary to be so play-by-play in this.- Addressed.
You should mention Quanto's lifting of the purse instead of using the slang term "bumped."- Addressed.
"who demanded the purse he had just pickpocketed from his wife" – Please reword more explicitly.- Addressed.
I wouldn't call Quanto's death "murder" by a long shot. Please change.- Addressed.
"of an unknown race" is a step OOU, as well.- Addressed.
"such unsavory beings" is POV.- Addressed.
"though he occasionally offered his victims or opponents an opportunity to stand down" – Not sure where you're getting that from with one documented conflict.- Addressed.
I'd not go so far asto call him an unskilled pickpocket, as the person who caught him was a Jedi.- Addressed.
"skilled" in the Abilities section is a bit of a stretch. Please merely say that he could operate the equipment.- Addressed.
- Graestan(Talk) 04:35, 16 February 2009 (UTC)
- Thanks Graestan for your review. Please advise if anything further is required.—Tommy
(Nine two eight one) 15:30, 16 February 2009 (UTC)
- Thanks Graestan for your review. Please advise if anything further is required.—Tommy
- Soresu
Nonetheless, Quanto went to follow the family while his partner alerted Great Bogga. Which family? You haven't yet established that the crew are a family yet.She's no Jedi. C'mon, lady…ya got three milliseconds ta drop the fancy toothpick, or you and little kid are bantha fodder! Is this quote correct? 'you and little kid' should have ‘and’ or 'your' inserted in between.. Or is that just how he talks?I think a P&T note should be made about his speech and use of words such as gotta and c’mon. If the objection before this one is just how Quanto talks, that will have to be noted too.SoresuMakashi(Everything I tell you is a lie) 08:25, 18 February 2009 (UTC)
- DC
Intro should be expanded, per the article's length.- Let me know if that is satisfactory.—Tommy
(Nine two eight one) 00:41, 20 February 2009 (UTC)
- Much better.
- Let me know if that is satisfactory.—Tommy
"Though Bogga usually gave Gudb orders, it was Quanto who carried them out more often than not." Context as to why Quanto carried them out instead of Gudb.- Addressed.
"Catching sight of A-3DO, the Sunriders’ protocol droid, Quanto positioned himself so that the droid would cross him. Rek then pretended to accidentally bump the droid, which caused A-3DO to drop the tray of foodstuffs he had gathered for his masters." What was the point of all this?- It is the lead in to why/how Quanto engages/distracts Andur Sunrider for Gudb to then kill.
Please mention that then, so as to avoid confusion. DC 17:14, 20 February 2009 (UTC)- Check that out.
- It is the lead in to why/how Quanto engages/distracts Andur Sunrider for Gudb to then kill.
You should probably mention something in the BtS about all of these indirect mentions.- Addressed.
- Good job, DC 23:00, 19 February 2009 (UTC)
- Thank you for the review, DC. Please advise if anything further is required.—Tommy
(Nine two eight one) 00:41, 20 February 2009 (UTC)
- Thank you for the review, DC. Please advise if anything further is required.—Tommy
One more thing: Why do you link to Wikipedia in the External Links section, when the article there doesn't even mention him? DC 19:54, 20 February 2009 (UTC)- Removed per objection below.
Is the financial quanto bit in the BtS really necessary? It's not going to mean a thing to anyone not versed in the lingo, I suspect, and doesn't seem particularly notable. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 10:24, 20 February 2009 (UTC)- I guess not. It has been removed, and thank you for your review. Please advise if anything further is required.—Tommy
(Nine two eight one) 19:11, 20 February 2009 (UTC)
- I guess not. It has been removed, and thank you for your review. Please advise if anything further is required.—Tommy
Comments
- Many thanks to Cylka, Green Tentacle, and Tyber, for assisting me with the sourcing.—Tommy
(Nine two eight one) 20:20, 15 February 2009 (UTC)
Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 03:29, 27 February 2009 (UTC)