Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Pui-ui

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Pui-ui

• Nominated by: --Eyrezer 11:23, 1 June 2009 (UTC)
• Nomination comments: Another species nom, this one a little unusual

(3 ACs/4 Users/7 Total)

Support

1. Lol indeed. --Skippy Farlstendoiro 11:37, 1 June 2009 (UTC)
2. Master Jonathan^{Jedi Council Chambers} 04:54, 2 June 2009 (UTC)
3. Cavalier One^{(Squadron channel)} 07:40, 2 June 2009 (UTC)
4. CC7567 ^(talk) 06:18, 3 June 2009 (UTC)
5. Jonjedigrandmaster ^(Jujiggum) 12:14, 3 June 2009 (UTC)
6. SoresuMakashi^{(Everything I tell you is the truth)} 08:28, 5 June 2009 (UTC)
7. Grunny ^(Talk) 07:03, 8 June 2009 (UTC)

Object

1. From the Council Chambers:
   • The pronunciation, as much as it makes me laugh, needs to be switched over to the {{Pronounced}} template and IPA characters.
     • Done
   • Are you sure that there are absolutely no quotes available?
     • None. Nothing in HLL and the rest are all OOU.
   • Good job. Master Jonathan^{Jedi Council Chambers} 20:07, 1 June 2009 (UTC)
     • Thanks for the review. --Eyrezer 23:14, 1 June 2009 (UTC)
2. The Grand Master
   • At the beginning of the intro, you say that the "Pui-ui were a small...", but at the beginning of the biology, you say that the "Pui-ui was..." I believe "were" is correct here.
   • "...the droids were able to diagnose enzyme eruptions in Pui-uies' third hearts, and so administer doses of Iotramine and Clondex, or they could insert Intravenous Access Unit catheters to deal with the condition." This is reads rather awkwardly, and is also grammatically incorrect. I'd suggest taking out superfluous words, so that it's something along the lines of: "...the droids were able to diagnose enzyme eruptions in Pui-uies' third hearts, and administer doses of Iotramine and Clondex, or insert Intravenous Access Unit catheters to deal with the condition..."
   • Jonjedigrandmaster ^(Jujiggum) 12:22, 2 June 2009 (UTC)
     • Adopted your change for the second one. I made some changes re the first. --Eyrezer 03:22, 3 June 2009 (UTC)
3. Soresu
   • Biology and appearance: Was/Were known is a bit repetitive, please change one. SoresuMakashi^{(Everything I tell you is the truth)} 09:37, 4 June 2009 (UTC)
     • Tick. --Eyrezer 06:43, 5 June 2009 (UTC)

Comments

• Special thanks to Muuurgh for helping with the Guides. --Eyrezer 11:23, 1 June 2009 (UTC)

Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 16:08, 9 June 2009 (UTC)