Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Preeti

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Preeti

  • Nominated by: LieutenantNaps (talk) 02:36, 16 July 2023 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments:
  • Date Archived: 16:56, 27 July 2023 (UTC)
  • Final word count: 563 words (65 introduction, 467 body, 31 behind the scenes)
  • WookieeProject (optional): WP:THR

(3 ACs/2 Users/5 Total)

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Support

  1. Great work, looking forward to seeing future nominations from you! TanDivoInsignia-SenateMurders Anıl Şerifoğlu (talk) 15:09, 24 July 2023 (UTC)
  2. ACvote Nice to see new faces on the GAN!—spookywillowwtalk 03:23, 25 July 2023 (UTC)
  3. ACvote Per above! Lewisr (talk) 23:50, 25 July 2023 (UTC)
  4. ACvote LucaRoR (Talk) 09:00, 27 July 2023 (UTC)
  5. Booply (talk) 16:50, 27 July 2023 (UTC)

Object

Luca
  • Welcome to the GAN! In the intro, a few elements are missing context (i.e. a brief explanation of why they are). In particular, Starlight Beacon, Fraunesaa, and Coruscant lack context.
  • The intro does not require referencing per Sourcing Policy.
  • In "Biography," you should probably state that she was working on the Starlight Beacon before saying that the other two Jedi arrived. Similar to how it is explained in the intro.
  • The mention of the Valo Atrocity is intro-exclusive and should be worked into the body.
  • Several links are missing from the body. Everything that can be linked should be linked once in the infobox, once in the intro, and once in the body.
  • "The reassignment to Coruscant was at the request of Galactic Republic senator Ghirra Starros, who needed help with handling an issue in the Berenge sector." This doesn't sound relevant to Preeti herself.
    • I was actually debating this myself. Went ahead and omitted it. LieutenantNaps (talk) 17:42, 17 July 2023 (UTC)
  • Some context is missing in the body as well, for Coruscant, for example.
  • Once you introduce a character with their full name, it is precedent to only refer to them by their last name if no confusion with other homonyms is possible.
  • No contract forms should be used in articles. (e.g. wasn't should be was not).
  • I assume no other quote is available for the P&T section?
    • I was able to find and add a quote for the P&T section, but if it seems irrelevant to the section I can go ahead and remove it. LieutenantNaps (talk) 17:42, 17 July 2023 (UTC)
      • Looks good to me. LucaRoR (Talk) 14:07, 24 July 2023 (UTC)
  • In the BTS, the full publication date isn't needed for novels, as per Layout Guide.
  • The categories should be in alphabetical order, per Layout Guide.
  • (review note) Please, give a look at my copy-edit, and feel free to contact me on Discord with any questions. LucaRoR Sigil of House Serenno (Talk) 11:46, 17 July 2023 (UTC)
    • Thanks for the comments, made the necessary changes! Feel free to let me know of anything else. LieutenantNaps (talk) 17:42, 17 July 2023 (UTC)
Anil
  • (Reviewing notes) Congrats on your first GAN! There were two formatting issues that I've fixed in my copy-edit. For your future nominations, I'd recommend checking out the Manual of Style since it covers style and formatting of Wookieepedia articles in detail.
    • To easily distinguish them in the editing interface, em dashes should be used by typing "&mdash;"
    • They can be pretty hard to notice, but articles should avoid "smart" (also known as "typographic" or "curly") apostrophes. (I'm talking about the apostrophes that were used in "We're" and "It's" in the first quote.) These usually end up in the article when copying texts from some websites or e-books.
      • Thanks for reviewing the article! I checked out your copy-edits and I'll definitely have to consult the Manual of Style page more often. I'll keep the em dashes and smart apostrophes in mind too. LieutenantNaps (talk) 00:07, 24 July 2023 (UTC)
  • Is the "Attack on Valo" capitalized in any source? If not, I think "attack" should be uncapitalized.
    • I checked the novel again and its uncapitalized. Edited! LieutenantNaps (talk) 00:07, 24 July 2023 (UTC)
  • Does the novel mention any details about Preeti that would warrant an Equipment section? It could be her clothing, ship, lightsaber, or other weaponry and equipment. TanDivoInsignia-SenateMurders Anıl Şerifoğlu (talk) 21:11, 23 July 2023 (UTC)
    • Nothing on clothing, ship, lightsaber, or weaponry. The only thing I could find was on a terminal she used in the office where she worked. I went ahead and added it into an Equipment section. LieutenantNaps (talk) 00:07, 24 July 2023 (UTC)
Lew
  • Welcome aboard! I think it would be worth including something related to the following within her personality and traits regarding her admiring Imri after he says hey to her, 'The girl smiled back, showing every single one of her teeth. A bit of pink crept into her cheeks' Lewisr (talk) 03:52, 25 July 2023 (UTC)
    • Thanks for the review! Added in the bit about her smiling in the P&t section. LieutenantNaps (talk) 23:47, 25 July 2023 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 16:55, 27 July 2023 (UTC)