- The following discussion is preserved as an archive of a good article nomination that was successful. Please do not modify it.
Pashvi (species)
- Nominated by: ~ SavageBob 00:38, September 9, 2010 (UTC)
- Nomination comments: Don't show them Hitchcock's The Birds.
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Support
--Eyrezer 09:49, September 13, 2010 (UTC)
Cylka-talk- 06:43, September 22, 2010 (UTC)- 1358 (Talk) 17:26, September 26, 2010 (UTC)
Chack Jadson (Talk) 21:28, September 27, 2010 (UTC)- Toprawa and Ralltiir 01:35, September 28, 2010 (UTC)
Object
Ey
I think you should mention in B&A section that they also differ from Chiss proportions. --Eyrezer 23:31, September 12, 2010 (UTC)- Good point. Done! ~ SavageBob 23:52, September 12, 2010 (UTC)
Chack
"The Pashvi were a race of humanoids who had wider torsos and/or longer arms than Humans." I'd suggest saying something like "according to Thrawn, they had..." or "Thrawn believed that they had..." so it sounds less OR. Let me know if you need more explanation.Chack Jadson (Talk) 19:23, September 13, 2010 (UTC)- I'd agree with that, but in the same source, the guy who has actually dealt with the Pashvi and met them tells Thrawn he is spot on: "I don't believe this. That's the Pashvi, all right." So, it sounds like Thrawn got it right, but unfortunately, we don't know which of his guesses was the correct one. ~ SavageBob 19:57, September 13, 2010 (UTC)
Cylka
The Pashvi were a race of humanoids who had wider torsos and/or longer arms than Humans. - Even though this sentence is factually correct, it seems to be very stark as the beginning of the intro. I think that everything would flow much better if you added that they were proportionally different or something similar.I'm wondering if it would be worthwhile to create an article about the Pashvi artwork. Even something small would be good.- Otherwise, nice job. Cylka-talk- 01:11, September 15, 2010 (UTC)
- How's the intro read now? As for the artwork, do you mean an article on their artwork as a whole, or do you mean an article on the particular piece Thrawn inspected? ~ SavageBob 01:38, September 15, 2010 (UTC)
- The intro looks good. I was thinking that a small article on their artwork as a whole would be fine and you could simply add a line or two about the piece that Thrawn studied. Cylka-talk- 06:01, September 16, 2010 (UTC)
- I can do that, but I'm a bit uneasy about it... We don't have any other articles about Wookiee artwork, Ugor artwork, Dug artwork or the like, at least not as far as I know. Can you think of any examples? Secondly, there wouldn't be anything more to say in the article that isn't already in the main Pashvi article already, so it'd be a bit redundant. What do you think? ~ SavageBob 06:23, September 16, 2010 (UTC)
- I can see that. What about just a small article about the particular piece of artwork that Thrawn studied? It was the basis for identifying the attributes of the species. Maybe the scene where he talks about it and them can be expanded a bit more in the article. For example, you had mentioned to Chack earlier that there was another person involved during that scene. Cylka-talk- 07:54, September 16, 2010 (UTC)
- Done! ~ SavageBob 03:37, September 22, 2010 (UTC)
- I can see that. What about just a small article about the particular piece of artwork that Thrawn studied? It was the basis for identifying the attributes of the species. Maybe the scene where he talks about it and them can be expanded a bit more in the article. For example, you had mentioned to Chack earlier that there was another person involved during that scene. Cylka-talk- 07:54, September 16, 2010 (UTC)
- I can do that, but I'm a bit uneasy about it... We don't have any other articles about Wookiee artwork, Ugor artwork, Dug artwork or the like, at least not as far as I know. Can you think of any examples? Secondly, there wouldn't be anything more to say in the article that isn't already in the main Pashvi article already, so it'd be a bit redundant. What do you think? ~ SavageBob 06:23, September 16, 2010 (UTC)
- The intro looks good. I was thinking that a small article on their artwork as a whole would be fine and you could simply add a line or two about the piece that Thrawn studied. Cylka-talk- 06:01, September 16, 2010 (UTC)
- How's the intro read now? As for the artwork, do you mean an article on their artwork as a whole, or do you mean an article on the particular piece Thrawn inspected? ~ SavageBob 01:38, September 15, 2010 (UTC)
Comments
Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 01:35, September 28, 2010 (UTC)