Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Otoh Sancture

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Otoh Sancture

• Nominated by: MasterFred^(Whatever) 20:21, December 8, 2012 (UTC)
• Nomination comments:

(3 ACs/3 Users/6 Total)

Support

1. Cavalier One^{(Squadron channel)} 10:16, January 24, 2013 (UTC)
2. Commander Code-8 ^{G'day, mate} 21:44, January 27, 2013 (UTC)
3. Assuming EJ's satisfaction. Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 23:59, January 28, 2013 (UTC)
4. Exiled Jedi (Greetings) 04:06, January 29, 2013 (UTC)
5. Supreme Emperor (talk) 05:37, January 29, 2013 (UTC)
6. 1358 ^(Talk) 19:55, January 30, 2013 (UTC)

Object

Exiled Jedi

• Does Gallo rebuild the city at a different location? Since he builds the city and then defeats the bursas, I assume that the city is built at a different location, which should be clearer in both the body and the introduction.
  • Clarified.
• Aren't there some glurrgs in the city when it is destroyed. If so, could you mention them in the article?
  • Mentioned.
• I would briefly mention the role Gallo plays in the fight against Rogoe since Gallo is the leader of the city.--Exiled Jedi (Greetings) 21:22, December 12, 2012 (UTC)
  • Mentioned. Thanks for the review! MasterFred^(Whatever) 23:19, December 19, 2012 (UTC)
• Although you mention Gallo was wealthy in the body, you do not directly say that the city was wealthy as you did in the intro.
  • Added.
• When you say that Gallo received an Encyclopedia entry in the BTS, please mention that Otoh Sancture was mentioned in it. Otherwise, it doesn't really relate to the article.
  • Oops, that was a typo, probably resulting from editing two articles at the same time. Fixed.
• Can you use CSWECite on the Encyclopedia in the source list?--Exiled Jedi (Greetings) 05:21, December 31, 2012 (UTC)
  • There is currently no policy stating it must be used. I was informed and also prefer not to use it.
• Thanks again! MasterFred^(Whatever) 19:00, January 17, 2013 (UTC)

CC-8

• In the first sentance just link to Gungan the first time it's mentioned and maybe remove the second mention
  • Oops. haha Fixed.
• The second and third sentances in the description both start with it was. Try to shake it up a bit
  • I combined them.
• Rogoe is in the intro but not in the body
  • Mentioned.
• A while ago I happened to ask for the CSWE entry for Otoh Sancture, which is here, in the section Requests from Galactic Battlegrounds, which you'll need to check out. Commander Code-8 ^{To say hi, press 42} 03:20, December 16, 2012 (UTC)
  • Added to sources. No new info. MasterFred^(Whatever) 23:19, December 19, 2012 (UTC)

*Looking over it again; Gallo's mention in the description should be moved into the history, since there could have been bosses before Gallo and it doesn't really describe the city.

• • Rearranged.
• I created the article for Rogoe's militia at Rogoe's army, so you could link to it in this article.
  • Linked.
    • Can't see a change here. Commander Code-8 ^{To say hi, press 42} 23:28, December 26, 2012 (UTC)
      • Hm, idk what happened then. lol Fixed now, anyway.
• Rogoe's mention in the history section is a bit awkward and could be reworded a little.
  • Reworded.
• Gallo's force in the last history sentance can be linked as the Gungan Grand Army
  • Link added.
• Add the CSWE mention in the Bts. That should be all. Commander Code-8 ^{To say hi, press 42} 06:02, December 20, 2012 (UTC)
  • Added.
• Final check: The infobox has around 3,000 BBY and the refs say in 3,000 BBY.
  • I've been debating with myself over this, and I've decided to go with "in" 3,000 BBY.
• First two sentences of the history say "the city" in them, one of them should be changed to avoid repetition
  • Altered.
• In the sentence where Gallo finds out about Rogoe's involvement, you could should say that he was roaming the forest for a bit before he met the militiagung
  • Done.
• Bts bit about the CSWE says Gallo was mentioned in the encyclopedia?
  • Typo. Fixed.
    • Probably should have sifixed it. Oh well. Commander Code-8 ^{To say hi, press 42} 07:09, January 21, 2013 (UTC)
• Lastly, I created an article about the villager who talks to Gallo and is the speaker of the quote at the top, so he could be included in the infobox and article body. That should be all from me. Commander Code-8 ^{To say hi, press 42} 09:03, January 2, 2013 (UTC)
  • Very nice. :P Linked.
    • Saying that the villager informed him sounds like the villager survived to tell him, I'd say that Gallo heard the villager crying out for help or something like that. Commander Code-8 ^{To say hi, press 42} 07:09, January 21, 2013 (UTC)
  • Confused that with another article. Commander Code-8 ^{To say hi, press 42} 09:05, January 2, 2013 (UTC)
    • I fixed the "informed" part.
• Just a couple more and I'll be finished, It should be said that Gallo mourned for the villager after its destruction.
  • Mentioned.
• The history section could refer to Otoh Sancture by name a bit more than it does, mainly the first few sentences. Commander Code-8 ^{To say hi, press 42} 07:09, January 21, 2013 (UTC)
  • Done.

Cav

• In the intro and bio, you mention that Gallo formed a small army after the destruction of the city. Is there a link for this force?
  • Well, really "army" may be exaggerating it a bit. It's really a small group of Gungans that fight the bursas. These are the first to fight for Gallo, though, and they eventually form the Gungan Grand Army.
• In the description, are the listed buildings for the settlement prior to its destruction, or after?
  • Before.
    • What about post-destruction? If its a matter of gameplay choice, then maybe this should be detailed in the BTS.
      • Mentioned it is up to the player what buildings to add and how.
• And now, the big one - should this article be split in two? If the new Otoh Sancture was built in a different location, then should it be recognized as a distinct and separate entity? After all, if a ship named Valiant is destroyed and a new one built to the same specs, that would warrant a separate article. - Cavalier One^{(Squadron channel)} 10:16, January 8, 2013 (UTC)
  • I'd say not. The new one is very close to the old location. It's like when ancient cities were rebuilt after a war, only this one is slightly to the east of the original. MasterFred^(Whatever) 01:55, January 14, 2013 (UTC)
    • In that case, then I think the reference to the city's new location needs to be clearer. As it stands, I read it that the new city was far removed from the old city geographically. - Cavalier One^{(Squadron channel)} 12:46, January 15, 2013 (UTC)
      • Clarified.
• Thanks for reviewing!

Comments

Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 19:55, January 30, 2013 (UTC)

• I'm not reviewing just yet, but I think that the first quote in the Gungan campaign (Not the reading out the recording title one) would be a good one to use for this article somewhere. Also the picture that's at the same time as that dialogue is also of Otoh Sancture, so it may be worth uploading. Commander Code-8 ^{To say hi, press 42} 10:27, December 9, 2012 (UTC)