Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/OOM-14/Legends

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OOM-14

  • Nominated by: MasterFredCommerce Guild(Whatever) 19:13, November 17, 2012 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: Can't stop (can't stop), can't stop the beat. I won't stop (won't stop), won't stop the beat.

(4 ACs/3 Users/7 Total)

Support

  1. This is what I get for working on an article for a while then forgetting about it. Someone else nominates it :P Commander Code-8 To say hi, press 42 04:53, November 18, 2012 (UTC)
  2. ACvote—Cal JediInfinite Empire (Personal Comm Channel) 04:09, November 22, 2012 (UTC)
  3. Exiled Jedi Oldrepublic crest (Greetings) 23:53, December 12, 2012 (UTC)
  4. —Jedi Kasra ("Indeed.") 20:04, December 24, 2012 (UTC)
  5. ACvote Cavalier OneFarStar(Squadron channel) 14:55, January 3, 2013 (UTC)
  6. Stake black msg 17:51, January 4, 2013 (UTC)
  7. ACvote CC7567 (talk) 02:28, January 5, 2013 (UTC)
  8. ACvote JangFett (Talk) 20:53, January 5, 2013 (UTC)

Object

CC-8
  • .Say that he was manufactured by the Baktoid Combat Automata in the intro and body.
    • Done.
  • Make sure you say that Harte Secur is a city in the intro and bio
    • Done.
  • Context on OOM-9 in the intro
    • Done.
  • .Say that Nute Gunray's the Trade Federation's leader.
    • Done.
  • That's all. Commander Code-8 To say hi, press 42 03:25, November 18, 2012 (UTC)
    • Thanks for the review. We got this GB thing in the bag. :P MasterFredCommerce Guild(Whatever) 03:38, November 18, 2012 (UTC)
Exiled Jedi
  • I think you missourced the equipment field of the infobox; it doesn't match the body's source for the weapon.--Exiled Jedi Oldrepublic crest (Greetings) 23:19, December 12, 2012 (UTC)
Jangston
  • Please mention that he had male programming in both the intro and bio.
    • Done.
  • "esponsible for guarding a droid control program in the Trade Federation Droid Army during the invasion of the planet Naboo during the year 32 BBY." This sentence needs tweaking. First, you could say In the year 32 BBY first prior to mentioning his task in the army. I wouldn't also say "guarding a droid control program in the Trade Federation Droid Army" since the army is an organization deployed by the Federation. Where specifically is the program?
    • Is that better?
  • In the next sentence, it seems like he had the program with him, so it would be better if you clarify that for above. And how was he defeated?
    • The game does not detail how he was defeated. I just says he lost it to the Royal Naboo.
  • Fact tag in the bio
    • Yeah, idk why that was there.
      • Because I placed it there for you to properly source something. Please pay close attention next time. JangFett (Talk) 16:25, January 3, 2013 (UTC)
  • The first sentence of the bio suggests that he was created in the year 32 BBY as well. I don't think that's the case, so please find a way to correct this.
    • Reworded.
      • It still was the same, but I took care of it. JangFett (Talk) 16:25, January 3, 2013 (UTC)
  • If he was a leader for something(and it did seem strange not mentioning this in the intro since he is an OOM droid), then this needs to be mentioned in the intro. It's fairly important to his character.
    • Added.
  • Was the device programmed into him or was it actually a datapad, solid object? I'm confused on what it is since you keep saying he had to guard it.
    • A droid control program is a solid, physical object.
      • I would like you to mention this in the article for further clarification, but it's up to you. Because he is a droid, it sounds like the programmed was installed/in him. JangFett (Talk) 16:25, January 3, 2013 (UTC)
        • I mentioned that it was a physical brown cube.
  • "Knowing that the program in the Naboo's hands could completely destroy the Trade Federation's efforts" Efforts where?
    • The game just says it is vital to Federation efforts. I clarified slightly by saying "invasion efforts."
  • "OOM-9 retrieved the program and reactivated OOM-14's army, afterward leading an attack on Harte Secur in retaliation" In retaliation against what?
    • Them stealing the program. I thought that was kind of obvious.
      • You actually corrected this after clarifying other issues. JangFett (Talk) 16:25, January 3, 2013 (UTC)
  • I would also tweak the P&T. I wouldn't say that just because he was a battle droid from the manufacture place, he would therefore stand 1.91 meters tall. I would say something like He was a OOM battle droid standing 1.91 meters tall or something like that.
    • Tweaked.
  • The expansion was voiced by Robert Pike Daniel?
    • Clarified.
      • If he was voiced by a male voice actor, then you could resource everything related to the male programming since a source actually shows it. JangFett (Talk) 16:25, January 3, 2013 (UTC)
        • Ah, good idea. Resourced.
  • I took care of the bts' first sentence, but please find a way to state that he actually appears in the expansion. I assume that he does appear since there's no {{Mo}} by it.
    • Actually, it is just mention only.
  • Be careful with redundant pipelinking. A lot of [[B1 Battle droid|B1]] [[Battle droid/Legends|battle droid]]. Just stick with the former link with no pipelinking. JangFett (Talk) 15:48, December 14, 2012 (UTC)
    • I assume you Sofixit'ed that. :P
      • And I won't in your future noms. JangFett (Talk) 16:25, January 3, 2013 (UTC)
Stake black
  • Please pay attention to the BTS section. The S in "scenes" should not be capitalized.
    • Oops. haha Fixed. If it's something that minor and obvious, it falls under the "Sofixit" clause. Just go ahead and fix it yourself. You won't get in trouble. lol
  • If possible, please upload the ogg file for the quote. Stake black msg 19:00, December 21, 2012 (UTC)
    • I have no way of doing that. Also, that is not required, so it shouldn't really be an objection. :P MasterFredCommerce Guild(Whatever) 18:28, December 24, 2012 (UTC)
    • Thanks for looking it over! MasterFredCommerce Guild(Whatever) 18:28, December 24, 2012 (UTC)
      • Well, it's mostly a cherry-on-top. But that's fine. Stake black msg 17:50, January 4, 2013 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 20:53, January 5, 2013 (UTC)