Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/OM-5

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OM-5

Nominated by: Erebus Chronus ^(Talk) 02:22, 8 December 2021 (UTC)
Nomination comments: About time
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Support

Manoof (he/him/his) (talk) 10:07, 19 December 2021 (UTC)
Braha'tok enthusiast ^{Hello there} 17:44, 28 January 2022 (UTC)
1358 ^(Talk) 16:01, 3 March 2022 (UTC)
OOM 224 18:00, 4 March 2022 (UTC)
MasterFred(talk) 21:13, 4 March 2022 (UTC)

Object

The one Editor who you all knew would review this

Ah, should have been more clear in discord dms when I told you about the vocabulator reference being to "the new character encyclopedia", I was reffering to Star Wars: Character Encyclopedia, Updated and Expanded Edition not Join the Battle. Unless Join the Battle says so as well Editoronthewiki (talk) 01:13, 9 December 2021 (UTC)
- Ah, fixed. Erebus Chronus ^(Talk) 01:39, 9 December 2021 (UTC)
~~Turns out Galactic Atlas does date Supply Lines to 22 BBY, so you can mention that instead of it dating the film and bombad jedi~~ Editoronthewiki (talk) 02:10, 9 December 2021 (UTC)
- Changed. Erebus Chronus ^(Talk) 03:32, 9 December 2021 (UTC)

Manoof

Last half of the last sentence of the biography needs a tweak - something like "forcing the droid army to advance through a ravine as the Twi'leks and their families escaped the battle." or "forcing the droid army to advance through a ravine, allowing the Twi'leks and their families to escape the battle." Manoof (he/him/his) (talk) 13:53, 9 December 2021 (UTC)
- Looks fine to me. If there's a problem, though, you are able to fix it yourself and inform me of a copy-edit. Erebus Chronus ^(Talk) 15:09, 9 December 2021 (UTC)
  - Thought I sorted this already, sorry it took a bit. Slight tweak made. Manoof (he/him/his) (talk) 10:07, 19 December 2021 (UTC)

BE-5

"In their investigation, the two battle droids realized that the gunship had been loaded with explosives as a clone trooper remotely detonated the vessel, destroying both droids and causing a mountainous pillar to collapse and block the pass, forcing the droid army to advance through a ravine as the Twi'leks and their families escaped the battle." This sentence is a run on. Like with the battlecruiser objections, I would like it to be split. Braha'tok enthusiast ^{Hello there} 14:03, 24 January 2022 (UTC)
- Done. Erebus Chronus ^(Talk) 22:06, 26 January 2022 (UTC)

Ecks Dee

~~The episode gallery in the episode guide mentions "battle droids moving closer to investigate the gunship", which sounds like at least an indirect mention of OM-5.~~ 1358 ^(Talk) 13:41, 31 January 2022 (UTC)
- Seems kind of vague to OM-5, since it could just be referring to all the droids and not the two that went to investigate. Erebus Chronus ^(Talk) 16:31, 31 January 2022 (UTC)
  - In the episode, the commander spots the gunship and orders OM-5 and OM-7 to investigate. The episode guide image caption is referring to those two, hence making it an indirect mention of OM-5. 1358 ^(Talk) 19:17, 31 January 2022 (UTC)
    - Very well. Added. Erebus Chronus ^(Talk) 17:54, 1 February 2022 (UTC)
~~The body image could certainly be one of more relevance to OM-5. The episode has plenty of good shots that can be used.~~
- Asking JMAS.
  - How's that? Erebus Chronus ^(Talk) 16:40, 20 February 2022 (UTC)
    - Slightly shortened the caption.
~~The OOM command battle droid is notable enough for an article. He has many lines of dialogue.~~ 1358 ^(Talk) 23:25, 17 February 2022 (UTC)
- Created. Erebus Chronus ^(Talk) 16:41, 18 February 2022 (UTC)
~~I think you need to clarify in the intro that the gunship was rigged to blow, otherwise saying the vessel was detonated doesn't make much sense.~~

I'm not entirely sure what's going on with the garrison. First you say it was overwhelmed (kinda implying it was destroyed), then you say it was forced to recuperate. Having rewatched the episode, you need to clarify this a bit: (a) Di's forces fight, but are forced to retreat into the mountains (b) they reposition their remaining gunship in a mountain pass to redirect Separatist forces.

"During their advancement, the clone troopers of the garrison, depleted of much of its resources, loaded their remaining [...]" This currently reads as if the clone troopers were depleted of [its] resources, which is obviously not the case. 1358 ^(Talk) 17:57, 20 February 2022 (UTC)
- These should all be done. Erebus Chronus ^(Talk) 20:50, 20 February 2022 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 21:13, 4 March 2022 (UTC)