Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/O'Niner

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O'Niner

  • Nominated by: Wok142 (talk) 08:28, 12 May 2024 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments:
  • Date Archived: 05:20, 28 May 2024 (UTC)
  • Final word count: 781 words (89 introduction, 638 body, 54 behind the scenes)
  • Word count at nomination time: 718 words (54 introduction, 608 body, 56 behind the scenes)
  • WookieeProject (optional): WP:TCW

(4 ACs/0 Users/4 Total)

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Support

  1. ACvote OOM 224 (he/him) 05:06, 24 May 2024 (UTC)
  2. ACvote Lewisr (talk) 05:40, 26 May 2024 (UTC)
  3. ACvote —spookywillowwtalk 04:31, 27 May 2024 (UTC)
  4. ACvote Master FredceriqueCommerce Guild(talk) (he/him) 04:35, 28 May 2024 (UTC)

Object

Lew
  • There's some precedent clone trooper info missing, see on Koho the info cited to the manual note regarding Star Wars: Absolutely Everything You Need to Know, Updated and Expanded Lewisr (talk) 05:56, 14 May 2024 (UTC)
    • Weight was missing, added that. I think that's all that was missing. Wok142 (talk) 17:26, 14 May 2024 (UTC)
      • The stuff with the inhibitor chip also Lewisr (talk) 04:47, 15 May 2024 (UTC)
  • I think the intro could use a bit of expanding Lewisr (talk) 05:56, 14 May 2024 (UTC)
    • Added two-ish sentences. Let me know if that's good enough. Wok142 (talk) 17:26, 14 May 2024 (UTC)
  • 'As a clone trooper, O'Niner was skilled in both armed and unarmed combat and had a knowledge of military tactics.' this line seems like it would be better in a skills/abilities section Lewisr (talk) 05:56, 14 May 2024 (UTC)
  • The episode and season number can't be cited to the episode itself, but can be to the episode guide you're citing for O'Niner's name (also the air date can be cited to it) Lewisr (talk) 05:56, 14 May 2024 (UTC)
    • Handled the above two. Wok142 (talk) 17:26, 14 May 2024 (UTC)
  • O'Niner's species and gender needs to be mentioned somewhere in the body. On the gender though, is O'Niner confirmed as male? I didn't see it in his entry in the TCW encyclopedia, is it somewhere else in the book? Lewisr (talk) 22:36, 16 May 2024 (UTC)
    • Added species to P&T. Gender was indeed unconfirmed so I've removed that. Wok142 (talk) 02:40, 17 May 2024 (UTC)
OOM
  • Great work! Just a few things:
    • Here's my copy-edit; would be fab if you could touch up the linking in the rest of the article as well. Also, I was about to link "shield" to deflector shield, but I'm not sure if that would be correct?
      • Thanks! I've gone through and done some more linking, including deflector shield. Wok142 (talk) 23:03, 23 May 2024 (UTC)
    • The article repeats the word "serve" a few times, and uses "action" twice in the same sentence. The writing would benefit from more variation. Plus, the wording "get a hold of" is a bit informal and ambiguous.
    • Can "bravely" be cited to a source? It seems to violate WP:NPOV, unfortunately.
    • Per WP:MOS, spaces in file names should be replaced by underscores (_). I also think some of the images would look nicer if enlarged. OOM 224 (he/him) 18:02, 23 May 2024 (UTC)
      • I've enlarged the images and tossed the ftbr on the image in question. Wok142 (talk) 23:03, 23 May 2024 (UTC)
        • Fabulous. OOM 224 (he/him) 05:06, 24 May 2024 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 04:35, 28 May 2024 (UTC)