Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Nightmare Conjunction

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Nightmare Conjunction

  • Nominated by: Zed42 Wolfpack emblem (talk) 04:54, 13 May 2024 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: We still have no idea what this thing is. It still sounds cool. And now it's a GAN.
  • Date Archived: 20:03, 2 June 2024 (UTC)
  • Final word count: 353 words (84 introduction, 225 body, 44 behind the scenes)
  • Word count at nomination time: 351 words (84 introduction, 223 body, 44 behind the scenes)
  • WookieeProject (optional): WP:NOVELS, WP:THR

(3 ACs/2 Users/5 Total)

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Support

  1. ACvote OOM 224 (he/him) 08:11, 14 May 2024 (UTC)
  2. ACvote —spookywillowwtalk 21:39, 14 May 2024 (UTC)
  3. ACvote Lewisr (talk) 04:48, 15 May 2024 (UTC)
  4. CometSmudge (talk) 22:07, 31 May 2024 (UTC)
  5. Booply (talk) 20:02, 2 June 2024 (UTC)

Object

spookly
  • I feel as if the "The story of Krall…" and the bit past that about Keradine should be moved before the 231 BBY sentence. Keradine did die c. 241 BBY so that might be worth just very briefly sliding that date in there, then having the 231 stuff after.—spookywillowwtalk 00:30, 14 May 2024 (UTC)
    • Good point, moved that bit and added the 241 date. Zed42 Wolfpack emblem (talk) 07:59, 14 May 2024 (UTC)
      • I'm musing over whether it'd be better to move the "supposedly expelled from the Jedi Order" to the end of that sentence and rephrasing it to be be clearer about who supposedly thought of him as expelled (many Jedi did). I'm familiar with the context having read these sources, but can imagine that it's unusual for Wook to use terms like supposedly without attributing it to its source a la WP:NPOV. But tldr just introducing that he was killed first, then afterward putting in that he was thought to have been expelled after his death, would make more sense.—spookywillowwtalk 21:01, 14 May 2024 (UTC)
Lew
  • Klias' pronouns aren't citable to the comic so will need another source Lewisr (talk) 22:05, 14 May 2024 (UTC)
Editor
  • "a Jedi Padawan during the High Republic Era who was killed in 241 BBY by fellow Padawan Tylera Yorrick after he had become possessed by a vitalicron but was later theorized by many Jedi to have been expelled from the Jedi Order." is a little long without any pause, maybe "vitalicron, but he" or "vitalicron, although he" to give it just a breath vi a comma Editoronthewiki (talk) 22:40, 14 May 2024 (UTC)
Comet
  • Maru being a master isn't citable to the the comic
  • I think the picture's caption should specify that it's of Krall and not the Nightmare Conjuction CometSmudge (talk) 20:33, 24 May 2024 (UTC)
    • Oops, for some reason I was under the impression that I'd done this already. Fixed both Zed42 Wolfpack emblem (talk) 21:02, 31 May 2024 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 20:03, 2 June 2024 (UTC)