Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Ni-Cada

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Ni-Cada

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Support

  1. Remember next time your nomming multiple articles of a certain "theme" to make sure the wordings different between them. Good work on your second GAN. 501st dogma(talk) 21:13, July 3, 2012 (UTC)
  2. Plagueis327 (talk) 22:19, July 15, 2012 (UTC)

Object

501st
  • "A Cerean male Jedi Master served the Jedi Order and the Galactic Republic thirty five years before the onset of the Clone Wars". Here you should'nt start with "A" as he has a name. Give the name here, and change the following context to fit it.
    • A Cerean male Jedi Master, Ni-Cada served the Jedi Order and the Galactic Republic thirty five years before the onset of the Clone Wars, this works too right?
      • As long as it supplies a name, it's good.
  • You're sourcing the first half of the first bio paragraph all to the Encylopedia, not the majority to Plagueis and the Marsh Huant part to the CSWE. Fix please. (The ref there is the type you use in the info box too, so that'l have to be changed as well)
    • Done.
      • The problem with the way you reffed CSWE still remains. 501st dogma(talk) 23:09, June 24, 2012 (UTC)
        • So you mean that I should reff it like this? <ref name="TCSE" /> instead of this? {{Ref|<ref name="TCSE">''[[The Complete Star Wars Encyclopedia]]''</ref>}} ? Or have I misunderstood you?Cumulonimbus Cloud (ℳeeting ℛoom) 23:01, June 26, 2012 (UTC)
          • Exactly what I meant. 501st dogma(talk) 23:03, June 26, 2012 (UTC)
            • Are you sure, if I do that then: Cite error: Invalid <ref> tag; no text was provided for refs named TCSE. Cumulonimbus Cloud (ℳeeting ℛoom) 23:06, June 26, 2012 (UTC)
              • The ref should be <ref name="TCSE">''[[The Complete Star Wars Encyclopedia]]''</ref>. Notice the {{Ref }} part gone, as those are only used in the infobox. 501st dogma(talk) 23:13, June 26, 2012 (UTC)
  • "During their stay on the swamp world, the Jedi were bargaining with a Barabel (Plagueis ref should be here), a cold-blooded reptilian species from Barab I,(encyclepedia ref here).." Same as I said before, you're sourcing some info that's not from the CSWE to the CSWE.
  • That's all for now. 501st dogma(talk) 22:19, June 24, 2012 (UTC)
Exiled Jedi
  • Should Marsh haunt be capitalized or not? You have it uncapitalized in the intro, but you capitalize it in the body.
    • Fixed.
  • "...of the non-sentient Marsh haunts, swamp-welling gray and green skinned creatures." Just making sure, but I assume you mean swamp-dwelling.--Exiled Jedi Oldrepublic crest (Greetings) 13:37, July 15, 2012 (UTC)
    • Has been fixed.
  • I created a redlink for the Barable, so since the article is under 500 words, you need to create an article for either the Barabel or the eatery.--Exiled Jedi Oldrepublic crest (Greetings) 13:43, July 15, 2012 (UTC)
  • You need to mention that he is Force-sensitive.
    • Done.
  • What did he talk to Plagueis about? Is there anything you could add from the conversation?--Exiled Jedi Oldrepublic crest (Greetings) 17:00, July 16, 2012 (UTC)
  • You might mention something about his combat abilities in the personality and traits section.--Exiled Jedi Oldrepublic crest (Greetings) 03:21, July 21, 2012 (UTC)
    • Mentioning his lightsaber would be a good idea.--Exiled Jedi Oldrepublic crest (Greetings) 03:27, July 21, 2012 (UTC)
      • Well the book did'nt say anything about if his lightsaber...
  • Could you explain why they wanted a speeder if the book says anything about it?
    • It said nothing about why they wanted a speeder.
  • His sensing abilities should probably be mentioned in the personality and traits.--Exiled Jedi Oldrepublic crest (Greetings) 03:27, July 21, 2012 (UTC)
    • Done.
      • Please use different wording than in the body. Also, you don't need to mention Lo Bukk here.--Exiled Jedi Oldrepublic crest (Greetings) 15:15, August 1, 2012 (UTC)
Cav
  • The Marsh haunt killings were perpetrated by the Force-sensitive male Nautolan Naat Lare, who was selected by Darth Venamis, a prospective Bith Sith Lord of the lineage of Darth Bane as a potential Sith apprentice. - what does hunting Marsh haunts have to do with Venamis? If Venamis's connection to Lare is purely meant as context, then I would consider breaking it into two sentences to avoid confusion.
  • Ni-Cada had a more reserved attitude, - more reserved than what? - Cavalier OneFarStar(Squadron channel) 19:37, July 22, 2012 (UTC)
Demos Traxen
  • I think this is very well done, except for the bit about the Clone Wars. While I think including it at all, instead of saying "Circa 67 BBY, isn't my style, I do like how you created a frame of reference by saying "thirty five years...". However, I think you should remove the part about the combatants of the Clone Wars - it starts the article off on the wrong foot, since Ni-Cada had nothing to do with that conflict.--Demos Traxen (talk) 05:51, July 29, 2012 (UTC)
    • Sorry, a few more things. First, I think "Marsh haunts" shouldn't be capitalized. Second, the extraneous details about the Barabel aren't necessary unless you're going to do that for each species. Third, "where the Jedi tracked Lare to with the skimmer" should probably be changed, as it's a bit clunky.--Demos Traxen (talk) 05:56, July 29, 2012 (UTC)

Comments

Vote to remove nomination (AC only)

  1. ACvote Outstanding objection from July 22. Nominator is apparently on vacation. 1358 (Talk) 09:29, August 9, 2012 (UTC)
  2. ACvote JangFett (Talk) 15:26, August 9, 2012 (UTC)
  3. ACvote Xd told me to for Uncle Sam. IFYLOFD (Floyd's crib) 16:45, August 9, 2012 (UTC)