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Nette

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Support

  1. Commander Code-8 Hello There! 01:43, 14 June 2021 (UTC)
  2. Props to Freed for making the ambiguity due to the awkwardness of such situations IRL and Quell's own uncertainty rather than just quietly implying a lesbian relationship without showing like so many creators sometimes do. Fan26 (Talk) 14:44, 14 June 2021 (UTC)
  3. ACvote OOM 224 ༼༽talk༼༽ 21:01, 9 July 2021 (UTC)
  4. ACvote 1358 (Talk) 14:32, 18 July 2021 (UTC)
  5. ACvote MasterFredCommerce Guild(talk) 21:51, 18 July 2021 (UTC)

Object

CC-8
  • I think around is a preferable word to replace "during or around" with. Commander Code-8 Hello There! 08:23, 10 June 2021 (UTC)
    • Around to me means 'that year' with an uncertainty of '+1 year', whereas the date note says it can only be during or after. It feels like the best option to me. Braha'tok enthusiast (Hello there) 08:50, 10 June 2021 (UTC)
  • Could use an image in the body, Yrica Quell is probably the most relevant depicted subject.
    • Done.
  • Her first flashback appearance in Shadow Fall needs to be acknowledged in the Bts
    • Also done.
  • "Quell chose to join the Imperial Academy for Nette to receive flight training to join the Rebellion." This sounds like Quell was trying to get Nette flight trained.
    • Reworded.
  • The page is in the Alliance members category, but doesn't have that in the affiliations. Commander Code-8 Hello There! 10:44, 13 June 2021 (UTC)
    • Removed the category. We know Nette left to join them but we don't know if she was successful. Braha'tok enthusiast (Hello there) 10:54, 13 June 2021 (UTC)
OOM
  • (Review note; see here) <br /> with the space is preferred over any other formatting. Plus, "installment" :P
  • The lead quote should be mentioned in the article body. It's got some exclusive info, such as Yrica telling Nath about Nette, joining the rebels being "the most worthwhile," etc.
  • Best to use (pictured) in the image caption to clarify that that's Yrica and not Quell (example: Maelstrom-class battle cruiser). Also, a full stop is needed at the end since it's a full sentence.
  • I believe it would be beneficial to mention that Nette was a year older than Quell somewhere around the first mention of Quell in the Biography section.
  • More context should be given for her discussion with the IT-O.
  • Would be nice if you could vary your use of language regarding the words "join," "after," and "left." OOM 224 ༼༽talk༼༽ 12:42, 9 July 2021 (UTC)
Ecks Dee
  • "Nette watched the recordings in her apartment with Yrica Quell, a sixteen-year-old resident of the Gavana Orbital[2] who was a year younger than Nette." If we know Nette was a year older than Quell, you can reword this sentence to focus on Nette by saying that a seventeen-year-old Nette watched recordings together with Quell, who was a year younger.
  • "Quell sat up tight against Nette, with her head in the crook of her neck and their arms around each others' waists." Having an entire sentence dedicated to their seating arrangement is way too PBP for a biography section. Either cut down on it (for example, you can mention it briefly in the previous sentence) or use it in the PT to describe their relationship. 1358 (Talk) 14:47, 17 July 2021 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 21:51, 18 July 2021 (UTC)