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Neeka Sot

  • Nominated by: 501st dogma(talk) 14:06, August 18, 2013 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: A random Vong assassin chick

(4 ACs/1 Users/5 Total)

Support

  1. ACvote IFYLOFD (Enter the Floydome) 23:30, September 3, 2013 (UTC)
  2. ACvote Winterz (talk) 13:32, October 15, 2013 (UTC)
  3. ACvote Sir Cavalier of OneFarStar(Squadron channel) 07:52, October 21, 2013 (UTC)
  4. Thefourdotelipsis (talk) 23:45, October 21, 2013 (UTC)
  5. ACvote CC7567 (talk) 22:10, October 22, 2013 (UTC)

Object

El Jefe
  • "While in Hapes Consortium space, Sot prevented Lah from killing one of the Hapan pirates that they were meeting with," Why?
    • I actually wanted you to explain why Sot prevented Lah from killing the pirate.
      • How's that Mister Floyd? 501st dogma(talk) 23:14, September 3, 2013 (UTC)
  • "There, the Yuuzhan Vong met up with a pair of Hapan Royal Navy deserters who had become pirates and part of the Peace Brigade, and it was Sot that escorted Benwick Chell and Vonce to Harrar and Lah." I'd prefer you introduce them a different way, like "Chell and Vonce, Hapan royal navy deserters..." IFYLOFD (Enter the Floydome) 03:29, September 2, 2013 (UTC)
    • Both done. 501st dogma(talk) 11:45, September 2, 2013 (UTC)
El Cavio
  • Sot prevented Lah from killing one of the Hapan pirates that they were meeting with in his contempt, - I'm not sure what you mean here; how did his contempt stop him killing him? Or was the contempt the reason for trying to him?
    • Switched it around.
      • Its still not making a lot of sense. Try rewriting the entire sentence rather than just flicking a few words around. - Sir Cavalier of OneFarStar(Squadron channel) 13:40, September 23, 2013 (UTC)
        • How's that? 501st dogma(talk) 20:25, September 23, 2013 (UTC)
  • be good at quick attacks - this is a little informal; the quote mentions "quick attacks" and "close fighting". Can you elaborate slightly using more formal language? I.E,: being "good at drawing" would be more formal as "a skilled artist."
    • There, proficient at quick attacks should do it.
  • Context for Nom Anor.
    • Pow.
  • You should establish why Chell and Vonce were to meet with the Vong at first mention of their arrival.
    • There.
  • You mention that Sot offered her life twice to Lah; is this correct, or a repetition of information?
    • It is correct. She offers her life just after having knocked the dude to the ground, and also before leaving
  • No CSWE mentions under Harrar, Lah, Vonce or Chell? - Sir Cavalier of OneFarStar(Squadron channel) 14:26, September 5, 2013 (UTC)
    • Nope. Thanks for looking it over. 501st dogma(talk) 21:59, September 5, 2013 (UTC)
El Wintér
  • "Neeka Sot was a female Yuuzhan Vong from an assassin sect that served the priest Harrar (...)", as it is currently written it seems as if the sect serves the priest Harrar and not just Sot. Which one is it? Winterz (talk) 21:47, September 29, 2013 (UTC)
    • There, remedied. 501st dogma(talk) 00:12, September 30, 2013 (UTC)
Attack of the Clone
  • Could you expand the intro perhaps a tad—maybe by a sentence or two? It aesthetically looks just a little short in comparison to the rest of the article.
    • Is that any better? I added a bit of context on the meeting.
  • In the P&T, I think it's worth mentioning that she had some sense of honor, per the fact that "she quickly knelt before" Lah.
    • Does "some notion of honor" work?
  • Perhaps a small "Talents and abilities" section would be warranted to cover those current aspects of the P&T that deal with her assassin training and capabilities? CC7567 (talk) 18:04, October 20, 2013 (UTC)
    • How's that? Thanks for the review. 501st dogma(talk) 19:35, October 20, 2013 (UTC)
  • Could you expand on the "supposedly" aspect of how a warrior can take her down? Is this according to a single individual? (In which case, it could be phrased as, "According to XYZ, …") CC7567 (talk) 19:46, October 20, 2013 (UTC)
    • Hey Dogma, I think you might have missed this objection while addressing the others on this page, so just giving this a bump. CC7567 (talk) 20:36, October 22, 2013 (UTC)
      • Whoops. Saw this when I first read the objections, and subsequently forgot about it. 501st dogma(talk) 22:05, October 22, 2013 (UTC)
Luckless Pedestrian
  • "During the meeting, Lah tried to kill one of the pirates because the warrior was contemptuous of the Hapan, but Sot stopped Lah from doing the deed at Harrar's request." - Poorly phrased, should be rejigged.
    • How do you want it rejigged??
      • Well, what you've done is good enough.
  • "She later killed another pirate because Harrar bid her to do so." - Try to avoid "because", basically.
    • Why???
      • It's basically verging on very basic English. "due to" is probably more suitable, or "due to the fact that" or some such.
        • I've changed it to "as", but in the future, I retain the right to use the word because whenever I so please. ;) 501st dogma(talk) 22:22, October 21, 2013 (UTC)
  • "In 27 ABY, at the time when the Yuuzhan Vong were invading a galaxy other than their own, Sot served as a bodyguard to the priest Harrar, aboard his priestship, disguised as a common warrior." = Comma craziness.
    • Commas are awesome. ;) How's that?
  • "The Solo twins had been a part of a mainly Jedi strike team" - Rephrase this for clarity, i.e. "a strike team predominately made up of Jedi" or some such.
    • Pow.
  • "Lah became angered by the fact that the pair deserted" - Perhaps some greater context on this. Was he angered because it clashed with his own code of honour or some such?
    • How's that??
  • Tis all. Thefourdotelipsis (talk) 03:33, October 21, 2013 (UTC)
    • Thanks for the review. 501st dogma(talk) 20:13, October 21, 2013 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 22:10, October 22, 2013 (UTC)