Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Neebo/Legends (second nomination)

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Neebo

  • Nominated by: Clone Commander Lee Talk 12:22, January 1, 2012 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: Hooray! It got over 250 words. Happy New Year!

(3 ACs/2 Users/5 Total)

Support

  1. Good job--Talrrivanian JaingHead (Headquarters) 11:41, January 2, 2012 (UTC)
  2. Nice work.—Cal JediInfinite Empire (Personal Comm Channel) 15:54, January 3, 2012 (UTC)
  3. ACvote JangFett (Talk) 22:17, January 9, 2012 (UTC)
  4. ACvote Article is currently at 253 words. Toprawa and Ralltiir 19:06, January 10, 2012 (UTC)
  5. ACvote 1358 (Talk) 20:51, January 10, 2012 (UTC)

Object

Jangeth
  • Reload your infobox.
  • I'm not familiar with the rules of the CA or how it generally operates since I tend to avoid it, but it seems odd that you're nominating this article for good article status when it's currently undergoing a review on the CA. I might suggest that you wait until it's properly taken care of there before you take this article elsewhere. JangFett (Talk) 01:27, January 2, 2012 (UTC)
    • Having read what needs to be required, please take a look at this under "If the article is over 250 words and is taken to the GA page." JangFett (Talk) 01:30, January 2, 2012 (UTC)
      • I'm terribly sorry for leaving that out. I already left a small note that I nominated the article on the review page and just added the correct message. Clone Commander Lee Talk 11:17, January 2, 2012 (UTC)
  • More to come. JangFett (Talk) 01:19, January 2, 2012 (UTC)
  • "Neebo was Force-sensitive and possessed the knowledge and skills required to reach the rank of Jedi Master." How do you know she possessed the knowledge and skills required to reach the rank of Jedi Master? From what's seen, none of this was explained. Unless you could give me a reason of why this sentence should remain in the article, I do see it as fluff. JangFett (Talk) 19:00, January 3, 2012 (UTC)
  • "and her lightsaber was later found and examined by Fisto in the collection of General Grievous—a cyborg who was known to take the weapons of Jedi he had killed—during his infiltration of the General's castle on the third moon of Vassek." Fisto examined her lightsaber in the collection of General Grievous? JangFett (Talk) 23:38, January 4, 2012 (UTC)
    • Seems like I have a faible for wording which seems to be correct, but can imply a other meaning. Adressed. Clone Commander Lee Talk 09:39, January 5, 2012 (UTC)
      • You didn't do anything. At the moment, it reads awkwardly. I believe it's missing a word. JangFett (Talk) 03:29, January 6, 2012 (UTC)
Tal
  • If it is possible, could you find a picture of her lightsaber to add somewhere in the article?
    • I fear this won't be possible as there is no clear shot of the lightsaber in the episode. Clone Commander Lee Talk 11:17, January 2, 2012 (UTC)
      • Ok, just making sure.
  • In the bio, near the beginning, you state that she was trained by the Jedi Order and later became a Jedi Master, maybe you can ref that?
    • The fact that she was a Jedi Master requires that she was trained and reached that rank. It is properly referenced at the moment.
  • Maybe more later, good work.--Talrrivanian JaingHead (Headquarters) 09:40, January 2, 2012 (UTC)
Cal Jedi
  • In the quote, you say that Nahdar Vebb was the one examining her own and others lightsabers. However, in the body, you say that it was Fisto and you make no mention of Vebb. It's been a while since I watched this episode, but weren't they both looking at the lightsabers? If so, Vebb should be mentioned alongside Fisto in the article.
    • Not really. Fisto, Vebb and their clones stand in the trophy room. Vebb sees and examines some Padawan braids and Fisto examines Neebo's lightsaber, also that is not clearly seen in the episode. Vebb's comment is about the whole trophies in the room and Neebo's lightsaber is one of them. Clone Commander Lee Talk 10:18, January 3, 2012 (UTC)
      • Like I say, I don't know too much about this episode, but it seems like something could be added about Vebb. Would it be possible to add in something to the effect of "Vebb looked over all the lightsabers in the room, which included Neebo's lightsaber?" I've struck the above objection since now it's more of a question, but would it be possible?—Cal JediInfinite Empire (Personal Comm Channel) 15:31, January 3, 2012 (UTC)
        • I rather prefer not to as I can not say surely that Vebb saw the lightsaber at all. Also it is very difficult to mention him by the current wording of the article. Clone Commander Lee Talk 15:51, January 3, 2012 (UTC)
          • Well, since I don't have enough knowledge of that episode, I'll go ahead and support it. Good job.—Cal JediInfinite Empire (Personal Comm Channel) 15:54, January 3, 2012 (UTC)
  • Also, you have a redlink now. You don't have to write it right now, but I just thought I'd let you know.—Cal JediInfinite Empire (Personal Comm Channel) 00:35, January 3, 2012 (UTC)
  • You have another redlink, and you'll have to make this one since it's in the intro as well as the body.—Cal JediInfinite Empire (Personal Comm Channel) 02:20, January 3, 2012 (UTC)
Toprawa
  • Maybe being a Jedi Master in itself means that one must have been trained to eventually reach that rank, but if a source doesn't literally say this, we're just extrapolating on information. I think we should avoid making this assertion without any real evidence other than we know she was a Jedi Master. The article should simply say that she was a Master by the time of the Clone Wars, etc.: "Neebo was a Force-sensitive female who lived during the last decades of the Galactic Republic. She was trained in the ways of the Force by the Jedi Order, eventually reaching the rank of Jedi Master."
    • While I do not agree completely, please take a look at the changes I made. Is that fine? Clone Commander Lee Talk 14:41, January 10, 2012 (UTC)
      • That works better. I understand that it's an obvious assumption to make that she was most likely selected and trained through ordinary means, but we don't know that for sure. Toprawa and Ralltiir 19:04, January 10, 2012 (UTC)
  • Please use the appropriate SW.com citation template for the Atlas companion reference. Toprawa and Ralltiir 22:59, January 9, 2012 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 20:51, January 10, 2012 (UTC)