Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Nazzar/Legends (second nomination)

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Nazzar

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Support

  1. As part of WP:TOTJ -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 13:55, 11 March 2008 (UTC)
  2. I supported it the first time, found it again last night and poked Acky to renominate it. Not much has changed since it was last nominated, so here we are. Greyman(Talk) 14:19, 11 March 2008 (UTC)
  3. Toprawa and Ralltiir 20:51, 13 March 2008 (UTC)
  4. Great job. Graestan(Talk) 14:57, 14 March 2008 (UTC)
  5. Chack Jadson (Talk) 19:11, 14 March 2008 (UTC)

Oppose

  1. Toprawa:
    • Something is strange here. It might just be a forgotten word: "that Nazzar should remain in seclusion from the rest of the galaxy,<ref name="TOTJC" /> that all philosophical systems in disagreement with Ulizra"
    • Star systems? If so, please clarify: "Spread over three systems"
      • It's been fixed. Greyman(Talk) 15:03, 13 March 2008 (UTC)
    • Please stick the description after the first mention of praefect in the previous paragraph: "the heads of each of the sects of the Nazzar religion".
    • Please provide a year for this description for greater comprehension: "That attitude continued into the time of the New Jedi Order"
      • We can't give a year, since no year has been given. The exact quote from the UAA is, "This attitude persists into the New Jedi Order era. Nazzri has yet to accept invitations to become part of the New Republic." Any year that we would add would be speculation. Greyman(Talk) 15:03, 13 March 2008 (UTC)
    • This could probably benefit from the same: "during the Yuuzhan Vong invasion"
      • Exact same situation as above. It doesn't give us a time line for reference when it mentioned the Vong. Please let me know if the quote from the UAA is required. Greyman(Talk) 15:03, 13 March 2008 (UTC)
    • Nice job on the BTS. I always like to see it done like that. Toprawa and Ralltiir 04:02, 12 March 2008 (UTC)
  2. From Graestan the Mighty:
    • "Ulizra" used too many times too close together in one paragraph.
      • I believe I've fixed this. Greyman(Talk) 15:03, 13 March 2008 (UTC)
    • First paragraph of "Biology and appearance" could use some sprucing up, a little prettier prose.
      • Fixed, I believe. Greyman(Talk) 15:03, 13 March 2008 (UTC)
    • Two sentences in a row beginning with "many" is too many.
    • Nothing to draw from FNU or DLotS? I find this unlikely.
      • Well, the only thing from the FNU and DLotS is that Qrrrl Toq fought in them. Nothing about the Nazzar is revealed. However, Toq's involvement in both conflicts is mentioned in the article, so I've added the appropriate reference tags. Greyman(Talk) 15:03, 13 March 2008 (UTC)
    • Graestan(Talk) 02:15, 13 March 2008 (UTC)

Comments

  • This was written a long time ago, by me, but it's nomination failed since no one really read it. So I'm giving it another shot :) -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 13:55, 11 March 2008 (UTC)