Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Nalia Adollu

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Nalia Adollu

• Nominated by: Clone Commander Lee ^Talk 19:02, May 30, 2010 (UTC)
• Nomination comments: Second project for WP:NSW. 269 words; have fun.

(4 ACs/1 Users/5 Total)

Support

1. Because he can.—Tommy ⁹²⁸¹ 00:29, June 2, 2010 (UTC)
2. CC7567 ^(talk) 21:19, June 12, 2010 (UTC)
3. Nice.--Jedi Kasra (comlink) 13:52, June 13, 2010 (UTC)
4. Toprawa and Ralltiir 17:28, June 16, 2010 (UTC)
5. Jonjedigrandmaster ^(Talk) 15:52, June 17, 2010 (UTC)

Object

Chack

• "She possessed enough midi-chlorians to be trained as a Jedi Padawan and trained for at least five years under Master Wen-Chii." Could you use a synonym for one of these "trained?" Chack Jadson ^(Talk) 23:58, June 6, 2010 (UTC)
  • Fixed. Thanks for your review. Clone Commander Lee ^Talk 18:05, June 7, 2010 (UTC)
• "In 995 BBY, Adollu's identity was used by the Sith Lord Darth Zannah who infiltrated the Jedi Temple on Coruscant in order to find information" Wasn't it in 990 BBY? Chack Jadson ^(Talk) 23:09, June 9, 2010 (UTC)
  • Fixed. Clone Commander Lee ^Talk 12:14, June 10, 2010 (UTC)
• "For at least five years" Yet in the body you say that it was in 995 BBY (so it was five years). Any reason the "at least" is in the intro? Chack Jadson ^(Talk) 16:30, June 16, 2010 (UTC)
  • We don't know sure for how long she was on Polus, but we know that she was five years on Polus. Clone Commander Lee ^Talk 17:43, June 16, 2010 (UTC)

Jujiggum

• Chronology issues in the bio, along with incorrect dates. Also, the intro is misleading, as it implies that Zannah infiltrated the Jedi Temple in 995 BBY.
  • Fixed.
    • In the intro: "Since 995 BBY…" Why did you change this back to "since?" Unless you specify until when she left, this wording implies that she is still there; and since we don't know exactly how long she was there this wording is misleading. Jonjedigrandmaster ^(Talk) 19:54, June 14, 2010 (UTC)
      • Fixed. Clone Commander Lee ^Talk 11:22, June 15, 2010 (UTC)
        • Hmm, the problem with the new wording is that it implies that they were there for just 995 BBY, and not any longer. Jonjedigrandmaster ^(Talk) 18:20, June 15, 2010 (UTC)
          • Hope it fits now. Clone Commander Lee ^Talk 13:31, June 16, 2010 (UTC)
• Does Rule of Two say anything about midi-chlorians being required to become a Jedi? If not, then you cannot source that fact to Rule of Two.
  • Rephrased.
• Jonjedigrandmaster ^(Talk) 19:07, June 13, 2010 (UTC)
  • Thank you. Clone Commander Lee ^Talk 18:07, June 14, 2010 (UTC)
• One last thing: In the intro, you say that she was on Polus for at least five years, whereas in the bio you simply say that after she went to Polus she was not seen on Coruscant for five years. Does the source say for sure that she was still on Polus at the time of Zannah's infiltration, or does it just say that Adollu had gone to Polus five years before, and hadn't been seen by anyone on Coruscant since? Jonjedigrandmaster ^(Talk) 18:25, June 16, 2010 (UTC)
  • Fixed. Clone Commander Lee ^Talk 13:35, June 17, 2010 (UTC)
    • As a note: your grammar and phrasing were incorrect, but I went ahead and fixed it for you. Jonjedigrandmaster ^(Talk) 15:52, June 17, 2010 (UTC)

Toprawa

• Is the image of Corsin really necessary? It doesn't really offer any illustrative insight into the character, as she does virtually nothing on the planet in her biography. The only thing the image accomplishes is unnecessarily indenting the text to the right. Toprawa and Ralltiir 16:27, June 16, 2010 (UTC)
  • Removed. Thanks for your review. Clone Commander Lee ^Talk 17:24, June 16, 2010 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 15:52, June 17, 2010 (UTC)