Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Mutiny on the Far Orbit

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Mutiny on the Far Orbit

• Nominated by: 501st dogma^(talk) 20:33, December 23, 2012 (UTC)
• Nomination comments: [Insert random comment here]

(3 ACs/2 Users/5 Total)

Support

1. Winterz (talk) 21:00, December 23, 2012 (UTC)
2. IFYLOFD ^{(Floyd's crib)} 05:55, December 26, 2012 (UTC)
3. Cavalier One^{(Squadron channel)} 12:50, January 15, 2013 (UTC)
4. <-Omicron^{(Leave a message at the BEEP!)} 02:49, February 2, 2013 (UTC)
5. Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 22:25, February 2, 2013 (UTC)

Object

Cav

• Considering the Far Orbit did more than just seize one convoy as a privateer, you might want to expand a little on this at the end of the main section. - Cavalier One^{(Squadron channel)} 13:29, January 8, 2013 (UTC)
  • There you go. 501st dogma^(talk) 22:39, January 9, 2013 (UTC)

Toprawa

• Some things I notice right off the bat: Unsourced item in the infobox.
• Redlink in the navigation template at the bottom, a violation of GAN Rule 8.
• I'm thinking, since this article title is conjectural, would it not be more appropriate to move it to the "Mutiny on the Far Orbit," a la Mutiny on the Bounty? It just sounds grammatically more ear-pleasing. Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 20:27, January 30, 2013 (UTC)
• Also, since the image caption in the body's picture is a complete sentence, it requires ending punctuation. Please keep an eye out for this in the future. Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 20:34, January 30, 2013 (UTC)
  • All done. Thanks for looking at it. 501st dogma^(talk)
• The fact that the mutiny was planned months ahead of time is currently exclusive to the intro. This specific detail should be mentioned in the Prelude section.
  • Added.
• This guy should at least have a redlink: "The lone COMPNOR Observation officer was overcome"
  • Redlinked. I'll create him someday....
• What are these threats? Don't rely on a section's quotes to do the article's storytelling. Detail this out yourself in writing: "Following the threats Kenit directed at Vedij"
  • Added.
• I don't understand what this is saying or how it relates to the ship traveling to the Core Worlds. Try and rephrase this. "as most mutineers went to the Outer Rim." Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 03:06, February 1, 2013 (UTC)
  • Better at all? 501st dogma^(talk) 02:42, February 2, 2013 (UTC)
    • Yes, much clearer now. Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 22:25, February 2, 2013 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 22:25, February 2, 2013 (UTC)