Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Mote

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Mote

Nominated by: TK 999 19:19, December 3, 2011 (UTC)
Nomination comments: Back from the grave.

(4 ACs/4 Users/8 Total)

Support

Not bad for someone who just returned from the grave.--Cal Jedi ^{(Personal Comm Channel)} 20:27, December 3, 2011 (UTC)
Clone Commander Lee ^Talk 11:37, December 4, 2011 (UTC)
1358 ^(Talk) 19:23, December 15, 2011 (UTC)
CC7567 ^(talk) 03:12, December 16, 2011 (UTC)
JangFett ^(Talk) 22:57, December 17, 2011 (UTC)
~Savage 21:11, December 26, 2011 (UTC)
<-Omicron^{(Leave a message at the BEEP!)} 19:06, December 30, 2011 (UTC)
Toprawa and Ralltiir 19:26, December 30, 2011 (UTC)

Object

Ecks Dee

~~Is it really necessary to include (various species) after the population number in the infobox?~~
- Removed. TK 999 22:16, December 10, 2011 (UTC)
"Since its parent system was less than 1,000 light-years above the plane, it was also a part of the thin disk,^[5] a region which stretched 1,000 light-years vertically in both directions from the galactic plane." This sentence could be worded better. Mentioning "1,000 light years twice makes it awkward. See if you can do something to it.
- Rephrased; I hope the indirect reference is adequate. TK999 22:16, December 10, 2011 (UTC)
  - Made a minor tweak. 1358 ^(Talk) 15:49, December 15, 2011 (UTC)
    - Thanks! TK 999 16:34, December 15, 2011 (UTC)
"Situated near the edge of the system, the cobbled-together Mote had standard gravity and a Type I atmosphere." Is the second part related to the first? I suspect its gravity and atmosphere is not dependant of the station's location. The location would also probably fit better in the above paragraph. 1358 ^(Talk) 16:02, December 10, 2011 (UTC)
- Moved information to first paragraph. TK 999 22:16, December 10, 2011 (UTC)
~~The latter parts of the first sentences of the intro and the description sections are identical. Can you please reword one? I think you could leave out some of the locations from the intro.~~ 1358 ^(Talk) 15:49, December 15, 2011 (UTC)
- Rewrote sentence. TK999 16:34, December 15, 2011 (UTC)
  - I was actually pointing to the first sentences (as I said (-;). I approve of this, though. Fix this objection and I'll support. :) 1358 ^(Talk) 16:46, December 15, 2011 (UTC)
    - I think I got it. TK 999 16:49, December 15, 2011 (UTC)

Toprawa

~~Please reload the infobox.~~ Toprawa and Ralltiir 05:22, December 18, 2011 (UTC)
- Done. TK 999 10:09, December 18, 2011 (UTC)
Terribly sorry for the delay in getting to this, busy time of year. One minor formatting question/objection. The infobox and the Description section of the article list the station's accommodations (cantina, refineries, law offices, etc.) in no particular, nor consistent, order. I'm not sure if there is a certain order you would prefer them to be in, but I think the order should at least be consistent with one another between infobox and text. Toprawa and Ralltiir 19:58, December 29, 2011 (UTC)
- Alphabetized in infobox. TK999 08:39, December 30, 2011 (UTC)
  - Just a note, I re-added the serial comma within the Description section to keep the article's treatment consistent. The BTS utilizes the serial comma as well. If you prefer not to use it, please remove it from all instances. Toprawa and Ralltiir 19:26, December 30, 2011 (UTC)

Prepare to be savaged…

Is there any way to break up the first lines of the lead and the "Description"? The long train of nested possessives and "of's" make it hard to follow. Otherwise, very well done. ~Savage 15:34, December 22, 2011 (UTC)
- Attempted to. Sorry for the late response. TK 999 20:28, December 26, 2011 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 19:26, December 30, 2011 (UTC)

Not really an objection, but the article seems somewhat emdash-heavy. Maybe cut down some. 1358 ^(Talk) 19:20, December 3, 2011 (UTC)

Done with this edit. Thanks! TK 999 19:24, December 3, 2011 (UTC)