Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Monjai

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Monjai

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Support

1. Cavalier One^{(Squadron channel)} 17:24, 16 July 2008 (UTC)
2. And the DarkStryder takeover of Wookieepedia continues :) Aqua Unasi 19:00, 16 July 2008 (UTC)
3. Ozzel 17:22, 11 August 2008 (UTC)
4. Darth Xadún^{(Consult the Holocron)} 18:10, 11 August 2008 (UTC)
5. Enjoy your GA. Atarumaster88 ^{(Talk page)} 14:12, 15 August 2008 (UTC)

Object

1. The use of "Unfortunately" near the end of the first paragraph in the Bio is kinda POVish. Might want to reword it to "Unfortunately for Monjai", or something else. -- Ozzel 06:44, 11 August 2008 (UTC)
   • Changed to "Despite their efforts" since it refers more to the New Republic as a whole rather than Monjai personally. - Cavalier One^{(Squadron channel)} 08:08, 11 August 2008 (UTC)
2. From the desk of Atarumaster88
   • "and installed Imperial prefects over the top of them" Reword/clarify.
     • Added some context.
   • "However, Monjai was not immune to displaying emotion, as evidenced when she greeted the returning crew of the FarStar after their months-long mission." This doesn't fit well right there. There should be a better transition here, please.
     • Slightly rewritten and clarified. - Cavalier One^{(Squadron channel)} 08:39, 15 August 2008 (UTC)
   • Have a Super Terrific Friendly Un-frustrating day. Atarumaster88 ^{(Talk page)} 21:16, 14 August 2008 (UTC)

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