Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Moggee (second nomination)

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  • 1 Moggee (second nomination)
    • 1.1 (3 ACs/2 Users/5 Total)
      • 1.1.1 Support
      • 1.1.2 Object
        • 1.1.2.1 Samonic
        • 1.1.2.2 Brahhee
        • 1.1.2.3 Macaroni
        • 1.1.2.4 Luca
        • 1.1.2.5 OOM
        • 1.1.2.6 Fred strikes back
      • 1.1.3 Comments

Moggee (second nomination)

  • Nominated by: Liverpool92Ackbar HS 02:37, 29 April 2022 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: second nomination
  • WookieeProject (optional): Wookieepedia:WookieeProject Comics

(3 ACs/2 Users/5 Total)

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Support

  1. — Samonic ChissAscendancyCanonSymbol 19:58, 11 May 2022 (UTC)
  2. Braha'tok enthusiast Hello there 10:19, 13 June 2022 (UTC)
  3. ACvote Fixed a lot of minor things in my copy-edit for an article this small. Please take note for future nominations. MasterFredCommerce Guild(talk) (he/him) 01:17, 23 October 2022 (UTC)
  4. ACvote 1358 (Talk) 19:02, 25 October 2022 (UTC)
  5. ACvote JediMasterMacaroni(Talk) 17:05, 26 October 2022 (UTC)

Object

Samonic
  • If there are three members of Moggee's species, why don't we have a page?
  • You don't specify his species on the body.— Samonic ChissAscendancyCanonSymbol 15:16, 29 April 2022 (UTC)
    • There is a page I had it linked in intro and infobox just not body.--Liverpool92Ackbar HS 02:39, 8 May 2022 (UTC)
      • Sorry for the delay.— Samonic ChissAscendancyCanonSymbol 19:58, 11 May 2022 (UTC)
Brahhee
  • The intro and bio, which cover the same thing, have less than 100 words difference in word count, considering that the intro is 174 words. I think the intro should be trimmed a bit for that reason. Braha'tok enthusiast Hello there 12:51, 24 May 2022 (UTC)
    • There.--Liverpool92Ackbar HS 20:07, 26 May 2022 (UTC)
      • Said word difference is still under 100. I think simplifying the failed trap part in the intro should help. Braha'tok enthusiast Hello there 01:19, 29 May 2022 (UTC)
        • Should be better.--Liverpool92Ackbar HS 19:28, 6 June 2022 (UTC)
          • I've done some further trimming, make sure you're ok with the changes. Braha'tok enthusiast Hello there 10:19, 13 June 2022 (UTC)
Macaroni
  • Species only needs to be mentioned once, not in both Bio and P+T.
  • The image caption should indicate which one is Moggee. JediMasterMacaroni(Talk) 17:58, 24 May 2022 (UTC)
    • Done.--Liverpool92Ackbar HS 20:13, 26 May 2022 (UTC)
  • I don't think the intro needs to mention Graf.
    • Removed.--Liverpool92Ackbar HS 13:45, 16 June 2022 (UTC)
  • Review note: here's my copy-edit. I tweaked some of the wording so that it reads a little bit better. JediMasterMacaroni(Talk) 05:43, 14 June 2022 (UTC)
    • Yeah it works.--Liverpool92Ackbar HS 13:45, 16 June 2022 (UTC)
  • The bio should mention that Moggee thought IG-88 was gone when he went out to investigate. JediMasterMacaroni(Talk) 22:03, 19 June 2022 (UTC)
    • There.--Liverpool92Ackbar HS 15:50, 21 June 2022 (UTC)
Luca
  • Why does the quote attribution say "(left)"?
    • I just put it in the wrong spot
  • "arrogant and cocky attitude." This seems subjective to me unless stated by the source.
    • I don't see how its subjective because thats how the comic depicts him
      • Being arrogant (and cocky) can be subjective: "having or revealing an exaggerated sense of one's own importance or abilities." Who says what's "exaggerated?" LucaRoR Sigil of House Serenno (Talk) 17:46, 15 June 2022 (UTC)
        • I changed it to overconfident and he underestimated IG-88.--Liverpool92Ackbar HS 13:53, 16 June 2022 (UTC)
  • "Moggee's name was identified via the aurebesh writing system in the comic story." Unless someone brings up a different precedent for this, it shouldn't be specified in the BTS. (Example).
    • I don't think it would hurt the reader to know.
      • Fair point LucaRoR Sigil of House Serenno (Talk) 17:46, 15 June 2022 (UTC)
  • The article is missing {{Mediacat}}. LucaRoR Sigil of House Serenno (Talk) 11:33, 29 May 2022 (UTC)
    • Added.--Liverpool92Ackbar HS 19:31, 6 June 2022 (UTC)
OOM
  • Preliminaries
    • The intro is a little too long for an article of this size. It's got too much detail as well. One paragraph would do fine here.
      • Cut down.
    • "bragging about shocking the bounty hunter" — do you mean surprising IG-88, or literally shocking him? If it's the latter then you'll probably want to mention the energy binders beforehand for context.
      • He planned to do it. Specified that
    • What do you mean by "a piece of metal" and "discovered the metal"? Please specify. I also do not grasp the significance of it. What does it have to do with the binders? Please clarify in the article body.
      • Its weird because he discovers the piece of metal on the ground in front of the binders and leaves, and when Moggee returns the binders shock him unconscious. I assume the comic is implying the metal caused the shock.
    • Any reason why CR-8R told this story that perhaps would be relevant to the actions of Moggee?
      • CR-8R tells the story to Graf to teach him to have patience.
    • Check spelling and grammar in the Personality and traits section.
      • Fixed
    • Is Moggee's skin pink as well as blueish or just "pink-and-blue." Discreptancy between the infobox and the prose. OOM 224 06:05, 15 August 2022 (UTC)
      • Fixed.--Liverpool92Ackbar HS 02:45, 23 August 2022 (UTC)
Fred strikes back
  • Honestly, I'd say you should have gone the other direction with OOM's last objection. That's definitely just a shade a blue, so you shouldn't need "blueish." Also, you don't mentioned the yellow skin color in the infobox. MasterFredCommerce Guild(talk) (he/him) 01:04, 23 October 2022 (UTC)
    • Aaaaaannnd I just realized I was looking at the wrong tab. MasterFredCommerce Guild(talk) (he/him) 01:05, 23 October 2022 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 17:05, 26 October 2022 (UTC)