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Min-Reva
- Nominated by: DarthRevan1173
(Long live Lord Revan) 22:00, August 14, 2013 (UTC) - Nomination comments:For Project Novels
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Toprawa
- At the risk of jeopardizing this article's chances of maintaining the 250-word limit, I think the intro really needs to be cut down. It's basically an exact duplicate of the Biography section, when the point is to summarize that section instead. This might very well drop it into CAN range, however. Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 00:13, August 27, 2013 (UTC)
- I cut out one sentence and a few words that aren't absolutely needed. Also added context that was missing and it's still above the word count from what I can tell. Let me know if you want it cut down more. DarthRevan1173 (Long live Lord Revan) 04:27, August 27, 2013 (UTC)
- I honestly think it's still way too long. The intro is currently 96 words, and the Bio is 133. Obviously, in shorter articles like this, the intro is going to be closer to the size of the Bio, but you can usually use the eye test to judge whether the intro is too long in this case. I would estimate that the intro should be no longer than two lines of text. Remember that the intro is about summarizing things. You don't need to elaborate or give context for things in the intro. Save the meat and potatoes for the Bio. Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 19:47, August 31, 2013 (UTC)
- I cut it down to three sentences, since I couldn't find a way to cut it down to two without removing what I felt is necessary. If it's still too long I'm open to any suggestions you have. Also word count is under 250 should I go ahead and change it to a CA nom? DarthRevan1173 (Long live Lord Revan) 23:57, August 31, 2013 (UTC)
- Yeah, I wouldn't recommend making it any longer than that, and since it does fall under 250 with this, CAN would be best. We can archive this for you with your go-ahead. Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 07:24, September 1, 2013 (UTC)
- That works for me and I would appreciate it being archived. I'll just go ahead with the CAN afterwards then. DarthRevan1173
(Long live Lord Revan) 23:49, September 1, 2013 (UTC)
- That works for me and I would appreciate it being archived. I'll just go ahead with the CAN afterwards then. DarthRevan1173
- Yeah, I wouldn't recommend making it any longer than that, and since it does fall under 250 with this, CAN would be best. We can archive this for you with your go-ahead. Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 07:24, September 1, 2013 (UTC)
- I cut it down to three sentences, since I couldn't find a way to cut it down to two without removing what I felt is necessary. If it's still too long I'm open to any suggestions you have. Also word count is under 250 should I go ahead and change it to a CA nom? DarthRevan1173
- I honestly think it's still way too long. The intro is currently 96 words, and the Bio is 133. Obviously, in shorter articles like this, the intro is going to be closer to the size of the Bio, but you can usually use the eye test to judge whether the intro is too long in this case. I would estimate that the intro should be no longer than two lines of text. Remember that the intro is about summarizing things. You don't need to elaborate or give context for things in the intro. Save the meat and potatoes for the Bio. Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 19:47, August 31, 2013 (UTC)
- I cut out one sentence and a few words that aren't absolutely needed. Also added context that was missing and it's still above the word count from what I can tell. Let me know if you want it cut down more. DarthRevan1173