- The following discussion is preserved as an archive of a good article nomination that was successful. Please do not modify it.
Merrejk
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Support
- Toprawa and Ralltiir 00:26, 31 March 2008 (UTC)
- Nice. Greyman
(Talk) 03:47, 3 April 2008 (UTC) - Good stuff. Graestan(Talk) 04:10, 12 April 2008 (UTC)
- Chack Jadson (Talk) 11:22, 13 April 2008 (UTC)
- Seems a bit on the short side... --Eyrezer 09:47, 23 April 2008 (UTC)
Object
The introduction paragraph is virtually the exact same information in the biography section, just without the paragraph breaks. It just looks funny to read the intro, then the next section read the exact same information again, with no more information at all. - JMAS Hey, it's me! 20:50, 18 April 2008 (UTC)
- I reworded two verbs to change it up a little bit. The parts that are the most identical come from his info on the CCG card, which doesn't do anything to elaborate on his role as a "freighter captain." Adding anything to it and doing much to reword would really be extrapolation. If you could point out anything further you notice specifically, or could otherwise recommend how something might be reworded, I'll try and change it. Toprawa and Ralltiir 21:03, 18 April 2008 (UTC)
- How about shortening it to just cover the basics of who he was and what he did. Then the Bio section can elaborate on it. Take a look now. If you don't like it, you can revert my edit. - JMAS Hey, it's me! 22:10, 18 April 2008 (UTC)
- Ok, this is in response both to this and the talkpage message: I'm reverting this because this just makes the intro too short, for starters. An intro should cover all pertinent topics of the character, repeating what will be read in the intro. While this is sometimes an act of redundancy, in this case, given the short length of the article, it unfortunately exposes the redundancy to a great degree. There's no way to reword many of this without extrapolating, and this is just how short articles need to be. Toprawa and Ralltiir 22:26, 18 April 2008 (UTC)
- Well, we'll agree to disagree on this. I don't believe the intro needs to be any longer than that. And all the pertinent information was still there, IMO. But I'll strike my objection. - 22:29, 18 April 2008 (UTC)
- Ok, this is in response both to this and the talkpage message: I'm reverting this because this just makes the intro too short, for starters. An intro should cover all pertinent topics of the character, repeating what will be read in the intro. While this is sometimes an act of redundancy, in this case, given the short length of the article, it unfortunately exposes the redundancy to a great degree. There's no way to reword many of this without extrapolating, and this is just how short articles need to be. Toprawa and Ralltiir 22:26, 18 April 2008 (UTC)
- How about shortening it to just cover the basics of who he was and what he did. Then the Bio section can elaborate on it. Take a look now. If you don't like it, you can revert my edit. - JMAS Hey, it's me! 22:10, 18 April 2008 (UTC)
- I reworded two verbs to change it up a little bit. The parts that are the most identical come from his info on the CCG card, which doesn't do anything to elaborate on his role as a "freighter captain." Adding anything to it and doing much to reword would really be extrapolation. If you could point out anything further you notice specifically, or could otherwise recommend how something might be reworded, I'll try and change it. Toprawa and Ralltiir 21:03, 18 April 2008 (UTC)
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